potential

nice... tried to read out from image to image, line?... Keep on writing... The question comes back now,

/you don't
really
understand
the question

do you?
Not abstract any way. regards

Hey Wesley,

I figure I will take you seriously and give this a proper review! It will likely be short, which is what happens with good, short poetry, there tends to be less to critique on the whole.

Firstly, I enjoy the line breaks you have going here. I’ve got some pretty great enthusiasm for breaking lines and you’ve done it really sensibly here. Sensibly or cleverly, whichever you like the sound of better. The breaks mirror what a cursor may be doing, I think, the short clicks in and out works for me here.

I think the line breaks would make this incredibly awkward to read out loud, so keep this poetry in the written and never the spoken, if you were to speak it, the pauses would have a detrimental effect on how the poem would be received, I think.

The ending I’m less of a fan of. I understand it as a comment regarding assignments and the like, where you sit and stare and have nothing to say until you just have to start because otherwise, what are you going to do? But I don’t like it much. I think that I find the ending problematic because I liked this as a suggestion of all unwritten, waiting writing. With your current ending it becomes a topical writing rather than just the writer’s block struggle. This is obviously what you intended, so there’s no way or reason for you to alter it, I just feel differently to you about the poem – as expected!

If we want to talk about the metaphor, the narrator being the blinking cursor just waiting to express, waiting to fulfill what is so obviously desired, then I think that this is even cleverer. The narrator as cursor allows us to take your end question on as a philosophical one, which would take this poem to a stronger, more reliable depth. I’m not sure if you intended this or not? If so, congratulations, if not, still congratulations. Doing things by accident is just as well.

I do think your ending limits the possibilities of the poem in the first regard, even if it opens the possibilities in the second. I would rate the second as more important than the first, but it’s really up to you, as all poetry is.

A lovely read, thank you.
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No I don't. But I like it.

Do you mean 'blinking cursor'?