little deaths (or 'for want of mutual suicide pacts')

i refrained
from giving
my beretta a blow-job
instead
i stretched my suicide
across
a year and counting

white
canvas covering
white paint
each
leaving one less
until my last
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guineapiggirl
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I actually preferred the one with the clarinet...

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Master_Yoda
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Are you trying to project a slow homicide onto me by making me read this poem? Because that's what you're doing...

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Jcoons
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Jcoons wrote a review · Sat Nov 10, 2012 7:38 pm

how sad. this is a very short piece. Great wow words but there is absolutely no punctuation. You describe the setting really well. If i were to rate this between 1-10 i would give it a 5 because i do not understand it what so ever and maybe you did not put any punctuation in there because that is your style. But its not mine.

You're right, the lack of punctuation is a stylistic choice. It's up to you to work out why ;)



I have writer's block. I can't write. It is the will of the gods. Now, I must alphabetize my spice rack.
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