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Her

Poetry
Narrative

Published April 2, 2012

Poetry

No one notices the girl in the back
On the outside looking tough and mean
On the inside hiding a terrible secret
But no one sees her, so no one cares
Clutching the knife in her pocket tighter
She forms a plan
But by the time someone finally notices her
It may be too late

Comments & reviews · 2

kimmybee

Review

kimmybee wrote a review Review · Apr 12, 2012

Again you do it! Epic! Your poems are so real!!!
The image is in my head, like stuck up in the part that's they call my brain. You have here no over descriptive phrase no obvious scenery but it's there...
I am so pumped to read on; I have to remind myself that this is a poem that has been written and intended to end there. LOL indeed. Great job- sorry for iteration but what else can I say?
I might have also been teased as what will happen. Will she kill herself or someone else? But it's great as it is no need to change that it adds to it if anything
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