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Where all wild things go,
There is a place for you, where all wild things go,
Someday you will join the earth, entering your home.
Your body, like dust, will join the sparrows in the trees,
As I cry and whisper, you can go now, my love, please.
You will be with the fish, swimming gently in our stream,
Mother nature will embrace you, with her warmest sunbeams.
And I will still see you, with the crawling bugs and dragonflies,
Although I know there will never be a day without tears in my eyes.
Someday, when I leave this earth, all I will be is free,
And the first one I will see is you frolicking towards me.
Finally strong, no longer constrained by the pains of your old bones,
At that moment, I will know, I have finally found my home.
Hey Ellie!
<3
What a heartwarming and sweet poem this is. I lost my cat at the beginning of summer, so it's really comforting to me, too.
I think the images added a lot of personality and expression and emotion to the poem that couldn't be contained in plain text, and I really appreciate that you presented it this way in sort of one continuous document. I think that was a really nice way of doing it.
It also kind of forced me to read each couplet separately, and I think you wrote it well for that; there's no couplet that leads into the next sentence-wise, and they each have a separate theme while all connecting to each other.
Even though the stanzas do read separately, like I said, one thing that I guess didn't feel like it quite fit here was the "you will join the earth, entering your home" line just before joining the "sparrows in the trees." The first line felt very heavy because of "earth" and "entering" -- it made me think of burial. Then there was (to me!) a bit of a sudden leap to being in the trees with the birds, and that kind of made me do a double take.
Like Ley, I think "you can go now, my love, please" was really the line that cinched it for me and made me tear up. I can absolutely imagine that pleading voice. <3
By the time I got to the third couplet, I could really tell where you were going (I admit the birds threw me off quite a bit because cat). I'm not sure if you intended seeing Tux everywhere as more of a memory thing, a reincarnation thing, or a science-y your atoms are a part of everything thing, but I love the ambiguity. His spirit is everywhere regardless of how you want to figure that out.
And your imagery is so peaceful. I like the use of "swimming gently" -- it's not necessarily joyful, it's bittersweet, but it is warm and calm and gentle, which is absolutely perfect for this tribute.
I have a couple of small suggestions here. Just a tiny thing, but "finally" is repeated twice in the last two lines. Since I'm reading in two-line sections, the word repetition stood out to me a little more than it might have.
The other thing is, "I have finally found my home." I guess I'm just wondering if a phrasing more like "I have finally come back home" might be more apt, assuming that being with Tux before he passed was home? It seems more like a return to home to me than finding a home.
But, up to you! Really the important thing is "you frolicking towards me." And I think you definitely send that point home. <3
Uh I hope it's okay that I had some feedback on the wording -- I don't mean to diminish your tribute in any way, and I think it was beautifully and heartfully written. Also something that was calming for me to read and think about, and I think that's true of many other readers who have lost a beloved pet as well.
Thanks for sharing this poem and these photos with the world. My heart is with you. <3
-Q
Beautiful poem and a beautiful cat.
Hello! Ley here to review this delightful work for you. Today, I’ll be using my 'Autumn-Themed Review Template'! We’ll begin with my initial impressions, then delve into the aspects that stood out like the vibrant hues of fall, and then get into the critiques. I hope you find this review insightful, and that you're enjoying the cozy charm of autumn, wherever you are in the world! Let’s dive in!
The First Signs of Autumn
I've read this poem like 3x (and tear up everytime) so I thought I'd come and drop a heartwarming and hopefully comforting review for you, Ellie! Let's get into exactly what I loved about this!
A Golden Harvest
These lines were the ones that made me initially tear up. I loved how you compared your pet's body to dust, because I imagined it so deeply in my head: the ethereal notion of one's body becoming one with the Earth. These are truly beautiful lines, Ellie.
This last stanza is amazing. It's the perfect way to close out the poem, but also gives off a bittersweet theme. There was clearly so much emotion put into this poem, and it shows so vividly. I especially loved how you mentioned that Tux will be frolicking towards you in the afterlife and it made my heart warm (and I cried even more xD). Thank you for sharing such a lovely piece of work <3
Wilted Leaves and Crisp Critiques
There was absolutely nothing to critique here. It was beautifully written, and I'm sure Tux really appreciates this from up above <3
Cozy Conclusion
Overall, this tugged at my heartstrings and I mourn for you and Tux. Just know that he's never going to be gone completely, and he'll always be guiding you and loving you from paradise. Thanks for sharing, Ellie! This poem was amazing. Have a lovely rest of your day!
Thank you so much for this fantastic review <3333
Beautiful dedication to Tux, Ellie <33
Thank you, Wist