Every day, I repent of sins I choose to make.
And every day I apologize
For praying insincerely.
The guilt consumed every moment of my life
The first time.
And the second.
And the third.
But by the fourth, I felt freedom.
Freedom to life, freedom to sin,
Freedom to continual and endless imperfections.
Freedom to everything I promised
I would never turn to.
I was washed over by a wave,
Which sucked me away with the current
Of the tide.
Drowning only hurts
Until you stop fighting.
Every day, I do things I regret.
And every day, I repent.
And every day, I don’t mean it,
And every day, I want to mean it a little less.
And every day, is every day.
And sin is sin.
Death will be death.
Freedom is what I have,
All I need to do is figure out
If it is enough.
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Woahhhhh Ellie at it once again!! Your poems always leave me speechless(in the best way)! Everyone on this site has a unique way of writing but your poems are always gonna have a special place in my heart! This poem is really quick and my mind seemed to want to read it at 100 miles per hour. Haha.
Your poems are always really deep and thoughtful and carefully written. This one, especially, is like the character wrote it in a hurried way like they were short on time and there are so many possibilities of their backstory and their life that it makes me go lightheaded(with excitement of course)!!^^
Thank you for your lovely reviews!! You are so appreciated!!
I love this poem. I mentioned yesterday that it has a frantic tone to it.
because it shows that things (good or bad) take a while to get used to.My favorite line is
It's like you're breaking free from something, I'm not sure what. Religion? Expectations? Whichever it is, good for you!
A line that stood out to me:
If you are repenting, but you don't mean it, do you actually regret doing the thing? I know that's how it is for me.
Overall, this is a great poem that makes it's readers think!
Your poetry always makes me cry or want to cry, and it is so beautiful. I haven't read anything so relatable or something that touched my heart in a long time. Thank you. <3
Thank you for your lovely comment <3333 It really means a lot, Orabella! Wishing you the best!
Well this poem has sort of a frantic tone to it. Was that what you were going for?
Yeah, definitely! I wrote it with a lot of heavy and overwhelming emotions- that's what I was going for