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Argh, I wish I could read Swedish, but I will try my best to review the English version.
The subject is very abstract, but quite beautiful. It addresses an age long question - angels crying. I'm guessing you mean rain, but it could also be interpreted in a figurative way as something that is bringing you down.
I love the reoccurring theme of asking them to stop, and how nobody seems to know.
The first line being a question, we (the readers) are immediately pulled in.
Even when the poem ends, we are still left with a question - quite unanswerable.
What I love about this is how simple, understandable, yet mystifying this poem is. The main issue I can think of is maybe it is too abstract. If you can give it a defined subject (say, instead of Tears, use Depression or something) it can give a lot more meaning to your poem. However, I love you style of writing and like what Dogs said, you need a swedish reviewer to fully appreciate this poem
Thank you!
Hello there Demoness! Dogs here with your review. Ok, I think that it's incredibly impressive that you wrote that poem in Swedish (I'm not entirely sure what the language is called). Poems, as always are far more impressive in their native language so I can't pass too much judgement and because I can't read the Swedish language I'm a little handicapped in that regard. So I'm just going to review the English version of your poem.
I like the idea you're driving at here, but I think it falls a little flat. It just seems like a simple story of Angels crying and people wishing that they would stop crying and than everyone's crying and than no one can stop. I think you need to drive at a little deeper meaning here, If you're trying to make a statement about how the heavens are in dismay than the middle earth is in dismay, or vice versa. Whatever works for you. I think you could really play with that idea.
Again, I can't really make a fair judgement of this piece because I can't read it in its original language. I think that it's incredibly impressive that you wrote a poem in another language, and I think that's awesome. Let me know if you ever need a review. Keep up the good work!
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