Lost without you
Your call is urgent, you have something to confess,
I can hear it on your voice, my life will soon be a mess.
Love is ugly, it's not a pink fluffy cloud,
it hurts, because when we meet eyes in the crowd.
You don't look happy to see me, that's your confession.
I want to cry when i see that facial expression
You look so unhappy, so sad and bored.
It hurts to know this marriage can’t be restored.
It kills me to know that it’s me you’re tired of,
that it isn’t me who’s made you fall in love.
So when I see that smile on you’re face,
I picture my hand rearranging it with a mace.
I used to be that ruby, the star, your universe,
I just can’t understand, what caused us to disperse.
Now I’m just one, among your many lovers,
What will you do when the truth uncovers.
Will you get down on your knee and beg for forgiveness?
Or will I have to beg you to stay, won’t it help to undress?
Will anything help or have I lost you forever?
Even if we swore an oath to stay together…
until death do us part.
But what hurts the most, is that even though you betrayed me,
in every way you ever could, i just can't figure out who to be,
if i'm not the girl insanely in love with you.
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That is really good it just blew my mind at how easily people can come up with things like this it was really funny. you spelled good and wrote nicely Aminus muney.
I loved it! It was freakin' awesome! Really good with some attitude, and it was something I could really relate too. REALLY relate, haha, I never break up wit people, they break up with me.
wow! its wonderfully written.. its out from somewhere there! aint it?
u know this poem can mean much more than what u've written!
as a feminist i think it cud make a lota ppl think wat kinda mess they're movin rite into.. so way to go gal!