I'm not a murderer...

by Demoness

Published October 17, 2010

In Pieces of Poetry

I'm not a murderer...

I’m not a killer;
I’m just a man with a knife
I’m not a murderer;
I’m just taking your life.

I’m not a hunter;
I’m just a man with a gun.
I’m not crazy;
I just kill you for fun.

I’m not a serial killer;
I’m just a man who kills a lot.
I’m not a psychopath,
I was just a kid who someone forgot.

I grew up emotionless
and I confess
I do not know happiness
love I can’t express
can’t feel
I’m surreal.

But nonetheless
I'm alive even though I’m a mess

And I’m coming for you
With my empty heart
Numb soul and sharpened knife
To take that happy life,
that could’ve been mine.

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Demoness
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Demoness commented Comment · Feb 21, 2011

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kjr5horses
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kjr5horses wrote a review Review · Feb 20, 2011

Wow this poem was interesting, creative, and sad all at the same time!

I love how you really got into the theme and tried to explain whats going through their heads. It was new, fresh, original, and defiantly creative! I have never seen a poem so well written and unique!

Well done! Keep it up!

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Demoness
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Demoness commented Comment · Feb 20, 2011

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silented1 commented Comment · Oct 18, 2010

This is far too repetitive. Lose the list and the I do this, I feel this. I am this. It's too repetitive. Your last stanza is better, as it has more flow and better presentation.

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Kwantack wrote a review Review · Oct 17, 2010

Wow. This is surprisingly sad and scary at the same time for me. I just noticed one thing on the line "But nonetheless". It seems a little redundant because those two words can mean the same thing, but if you like it, then great! Keep writing! I loved it.



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