She's in every breath I breathe,
tulips and raspberry tea.
And I, believe
that she loves me.
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WHY WAS I SO PROUD OF THIS CRAP AAAAHHHH IT'S SO BAD NUUUUU
So, I read your poem, and I read all the "reviews" because...well, that's just something I do. And, almost every person said, "Make it longer." "Expand your poem." And you said, "I don't have anything else to say." I just wanted to say that I got you. Sometimes, when you've said what you needed to say, nothing else needs to be said, if that makes sense. This isn't a review, I just wanted to say that I back your decision, and I understand where you're coming from.
~Caterpickle
Thank you
??????????. What should I write in a review. It is finished before I realised its start. It could be converted into a beautiful poem and I believe that you can do it magnificently. Trust me dear try AMD you'll write awesome. I'm waiting to read ot. So complete it and post again. Keep wroting. Blessings!
Complete it? It's already completed. I have no more to say.
May be for you but for me it can be mote beautiful.
stay blessed.
I did like this but I thought it could be longer since the title is so long and when you spray perfume the scent is just so lovely. You should describe the smell so we can tell what it's like too. And the structure is a bit odd. It doesn't look very sweet and flowy like perfume is. It could be very, very sweet though if you added more flow and length because poetry is supposed to be different than simple writing in the way it sounds. Well, I hope this helped! Keep writing and never get discouraged!
~Keepwriting
Thanks for this review. This was originally supposed to be the chorus to a song but I don't really know how to write songs. So I made it a lyrical poem. I don't have anymore to say which is why I don't want to expand it. Thanks for the review.
This is really sweet! ^_^ I love it!!!
Thanks
I do agree it could be a bit longer, but other than that it was a pretty decent poem. You should keep writing these poems of yours:>.
Ta ta,
Winchester19867
Why should it be longer? I have nothing more to say. Anyway thanks for the review.
I do get the "there's nothing else I need to say" feelings too sometimes, I just think it needs a bit more to it. And as I was reading it, it felt like eating lucky charms without the marshmallow part. Maybe even if you added more by twisting some of the words into new words. Anyways, that is just my opinion, and I apologize if it sounds a bit rudeshly mean, just know that wasn't my intention, keep up the good work!
~Winchester19867
Oh wow. ;_; That was so sweet, Alice. This is definitely one of your top poems ever.
Thanks!
I'm going to review your poem but I don't think it needs to be reviewed.
First let me say it's short and to the point and I don't really understand it. I have read your poem a few times and I think it's about trying to figure out if a girl likes you or not, correct me if I'm wrong. I want to believe that you are a good writer though you could expand on your poem.
I hope you keep on writing and keep up the good work. Have a nice day, evening, morning, night, or afternoon.
Why should it be longer? I have nothing more to say. Anyway thanks for the review.