Restless: Chapter I

Hi!
I really liked your poem!
I liked how you left it on a cliff hanger type and I also like how you have presented your poem.
I lie the repetition and the rhymes. I also like the use of punctuation you have used and you have managed to grab the audiences attentiuon in the first line! Which is hard to do but I am really impressed that you managed to do this and I really like your work!
Keep posting!

Wow, this is really nice. I really like all of your poems, and this one is amazing!:D

Good poem but i assume you can do better;-)

Hey Alice Fangirl here to review your astonishingly beautiful work,
That was really interesting.
You really know how to hook people up with your work. The "tap tap" I'm considering as tapping of figures. And you really described it well and beautifully. I hope to read more chapters of this new story soon.

Keep up the good work!
Fangirl~

Hi AliceAfternoon!!
This is Eros here to review your sweet poem!!

Hmm... so this is a story based poetry collection. It seems really interesting! Your very first chapter is a BANG! This has created a curiosity to know what was her reply to the question of why was she restless???!!!
This is really a sweet chapter, and I want to know about her answer. Please let me know when you publish the next chapter.

Keep writing...
Because we all love to keep reading your works!!

That . . . was brilliant. Chills. I have chills.