Hello there, Casanova!
Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^
I agree that after reading a lyric sheet of "We Don't Talk Anymore" that this sounds eerily like that song. Some parts I even read with the same tune, and can barely distinguish the difference between the lyrics. I understand that inspiration in writing is a common thing, but it shouldn't be /this/ similar. You can try to write something about the same phrase, and heck, even use a phrase from the original work if you really like it, but try your best to be as original as possible. I see that you have said that nothing is original, which is true, but you should at least be able to distinguish two pieces of writing as a work of a specific author.
Also a little bit of a nitpick which isn't really important in terms of presentation because these are song lyrics; the punctuation is all over the place. Some places don't have it, others due, capitalization are at the beginning of some parts but not at others, etc etc. I suggest making your punctuation consistent.
The lyrics are unoriginal, not in the sense of what I mentioned before about this seeming like that other song, but in the sense that most of the lyrics are a bit done to death. Some transitions don't really fit in together very well, which could use some tweaking in terms of flow.
That's all I have to say about this poem. I hope my review helps you out, and have a great day! ^-^
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