Casa!
I am slow-going, I know <3
I had a chance to listen and I definitely think that rap and spoken verse suits you. Here's the thing I wish to impart to you, remember that content should always fit form. What do I mean by that?
A lullaby that is soothing is usually whispered.
Dr. Seuss verse is read in a sing-song way.
Think of all your favorite rappers, pay attention to variation in their voices, their tones, and how those variations will fit with their lyric. When you write love, your voice should reflect it. When you write pain, your voice should reflect it. Not just your voice though, your words too! There is not much variation in tone from your reading, everything is said almost mono-tone in a rapid-fire way and your words reflect that too. There is a lot of focus to beat, a lot of focus to words with hard sounds and you deliver them in rapid-fire hardness from beginning to end. It definitely shows a hardness to the narration which is appreciated, but it would be dull if that was all it was from beginning to end.
Find places to slow down, find places to lower your sound, or increase the sound! Find places to change the quality and tone of your voice --- once you do this, then maybe you can find places in your choice of words to change to go with that pitch, so that word + pitch together can create moods!
You talk in the beginning a love story, about a girl with a sweet voice-- your own voice should reflect that.
I hope this helps. Always happy to chat this out with you more of course c:
~ as always, Audy
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