I swore I couldn't make it without you
I knew I couldn't live without you But I'm doin' fineYeah, right
That's what I'm tellin' myself
It's all lies
Can't believe I just realized
You're my world
These late nights' writin'
short days smilin'
The way you stay on my mind can't be helped
But I can't see why you're on my mind
But you can't be here
I scream and shout and let out these tears
But only in private
No one sees the pain I'm in
No one understands the way I feel or what I've been through
They don't see the love I have for you
Now tell me can you hear this
And tell me can you feel this
I wrote these lines so you could hear
So you'd no longer have to be scared
We no longer be together
But I still love you
And just wait
I'll find a way to you
The distance between us
It don't matter
The lack of talking
It still can't shatter
the bond between us
Hope- that's all we need to plant the startin' seeds
There ain't nothin' that can stop us
an' that's why
I dream about you
every night
wake up and I scream and I shout
'cause I miss you
Oh I miss you
miss the feel of your hand in mine
Miss all the time we can't get back
But don't think for a second
That I'm giving up
We just gotta wait till the time is right
And I hope you're waitin' too
They keep us apart
Not realizing the pain they start-ed
Not comprehending the visions goin' on in my head
Not realizin' that I miss your hand in mine- miss you in my bed
You should be here
lying beside me
You shouldn't be there
not able to see me
I need somethin' to alleviate this pain that resonates from my soul
I used to wear my heart on my sleeve- but now it's gettin' old
No one cares what I do either way it goes
I had grown so bold
I don't see what's wrong with me
If you don't call or say somethin' I don't have a clue as to what I'll do
And it's sad too
'cause we're already through
But I need you soon
Before I break
give me your love
All I can take
I'm standin' here
I'm willin' to chase it
That's why
I dream about you
Every night
wake up and I scream and I shout
'cause I miss you
Oh I miss you
Miss the feel of your hand in mine
Miss all the time we can't get back
But don't you think for a second that I'm givin' up
We just gotta wait until the time is right
And I hope you're waitin' too
I don't think you understand our actions while together
We tried so hard, we tried so long, we tried for forever
But it can't be
We were supposed to be for eternity
But you left me
With nothin' but shattered hopes and dreams
You couldn't help it, could you?
Oh Matthew
I remember you speakin' my name as if it was yesterday
An' thinking 'bout you has these tears fallin' like rain
I think it's time to admit
I'm not okay
"Move on, it's the only way," they always say
But that's not how it works
They ain't listening
They ain't hearin' the words I'm sayin'
How can I just move on when my love for you isn't gone?
How am I still stuck on you, though? It's a spiritual phenomenon
I can't keep this act on
I'm breakin' down
It's time to show everyone about the anger I've found
Why?
Why do they keep you from me?
They knew I made a promise never to leave
But it's too late
They can't bring you back
Not now
Not ever
They caused us to be apart forever
That's why
I dream about you
Every night
wake up and I scream and I shout
'cause I miss you
oh I miss you
Miss the feel of your hand in mine
miss all the time we can't get back
But don't you think for a second
that I'm giving up
We just gotta wait until the time is right
And I hope you're waitin' too
I thought..
That love lasted forever
And I guess Love itself does
But the good feelings you get from that
All the happiness and joy you feel from it
Cherish those feelings, and don't dwell on the bad ones
Because love is a fragile thing
You have to cherish every second of it
Before it falls apart
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That was just so... Heartbreaking. I really really don't know what to say that will make you understand that THAT is truly lovely... Are you some lyrics GOD or something? Seriously dude just keep goin'!
XOXO
Wow...this could come off as a little cliche, if it's not based on a true story, but if you're writing based on real experiences, it's pretty good!
Either way, I have some critique.
The crossing out of "but I'm doin' fine" and the "yeah right" seem redundant to me. I think you could do without the strike through.
I really liked the italicizes chorus.
My favorite part:
"How can I just move on when my love for you isn't gone?
How am I still stuck on you, though? It's a spiritual phenomenon."
It just flows so well and drives home the point of the song.
Wow, just wow. Good work.
Hello! It is Mikey for a review,
First, i must appreciate for the wonderful work done and the creativity of your poem. The imagery is well expressed and can easilly be pointed out clearly at almost every point you intended to.
Second, i would like to point out on some areas where i think all did not go well. When i look at your work, i faill to understand the use of italics writings like for stanzas four, seven and eleven which are all written in itallics...Maybe you wanted to show the strong areas of concern in the poem if i may guess but i dont think it is the right way since they are also equally the stanzas of the poem just the other stanzas which are not itallised..I like the use of itallics when pointing out some special phrases or words like you used in stanza one "you are my world" and for stanza three " still love you" but not for stanza nine the word "oh mathew"
In general, the work is just wow!
The note at the end was truly beautiful! The lyrics were lovely too! Keep up the good work.
The note at the end was truly beautiful! The lyrics were lovely too! Keep up the good work.
The note at the end was truly beautiful! The lyrics were lovely too! Keep up the good work.
I like how this is written. It has an interesting rhyme scheme and I like the way it falls together. I enjoyed reading this. It sounds like you put some thought into this, as well as maybe your own experience. Keep it up!
I also think that the way you put "smilin'" and "sayin'" instead of "smiling" and "saying" (etc) is a good way to show the reader or listener how you see the words being said or written or pronounced. It gives the reader/listener a good viewpoint on what this poem/set of lyrics is supposed to FEEL. It sets a great atmosphere.