I'm Sorry

Hey kingolions,

You continue to better yourself with each new poem. I loved this poem! It gave off this nice serenity feel to it because you didn't use harsh words with the topic your wrote about. I like the changes you have made to better accommodate the readers (shows you read your comments). It flowed brilliantly with only a few mistakes here and there yet they are only tiny mistakes which people always make. Love the style of writing you choose to write about. My favourite stanzas are:

Two words were all I had.
But I knew it was not enough.
Three times you told me so,
and I shall never forget.
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The mountains you showed me once,
wouldn't hold you high enough.
And I hope that you know,
if you fall I'd always catch you.

Two words were all I had.
But I knew it was not enough.
Three times you told me so,
and I shall never forget.

Many things I have done wrong, i would have put I've
but I tried to make it up to you.
I write this now so you may know,
how I truly feel.

The mountains you showed me once,
wouldn't hold you high enough.
And I hope that you know,
if you fell I'd always catch you. it is past but this needs to be presents tense so it should be fall

I know it's all been said before,
and it sounds so cliche.
But it's true and honestly, you can take this out...
I hoped you would forgive me.

These last words are all I write,
because once I said I would never.
But somehow you just draw me in,
and now I must say good bye.

Hello there

First off there were some errors in this but it looks like lydia has outlined and corrected them.
I loved it. It was so sincere and emotional and real...you know.

Two words were all I had.
But I knew it was not enough.
Three times you told me so,
and I shall never forget.

Hello Kingolions!

I loved this! There were a couple of little nit-picks I noticed in this but overall it was really touching!

Many things I have done wrong,
but I tried to make it up to you. I think you meant to here!
I write this now so you may know,
how I truly (I deleted do, I don't think you need it!) feel

But it's true, and honestly, There is a natural pause where I have put the comma
I hoped you would forgive me.

kingolions wrote:Two words were all I had. Brilliant opening line (;
But I knew it was not enough.
Three times you told me so,
and I shall never forget.

Many thing I have done wrong,
but I tried to make it up for you.
I write this now so you may know,
how I truly do feel.

The mountains you showed me once,
wouldn't hold you high enough. These are my favorite two lines in the entire poem XD
And I hope that you know,
if you fell I'd always catch you.

I know it's all been said before,
and it sounds so cliche.
But it's true and honestly,
I hoped you would forgive me.

These last words are all I write,
because once I said I would never.
But somehow you just draw me in,
and now I must say good bye.

Okay, so yeah. I loved this! Honestly, you've got skills... I don't have much to say about this, because I can't really find anything negative about it. So I'll leave that for the professionals, but yeah, this was a really cool poem