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Love the idea! Beautifully written, perfectly choosing the right words for each sentence. The end was a bit confusing but a solid poem
at times the poem lacked a bit of passion and the feeling - not really a major problem but.. However, I loved the fact that in the last stanza you repeated a single word, it really made a difference and add so much effect to the whole poem.also, another positive note is that you never waffled on or made the poem get dull - always interesting sentences! I also love how you refer to yourself in the 6th line, and then you go on to refer to how you are feeling. that really captivated my attention. Really a pleasure to read. A great piece of work and keep it up!
This was actually pretty good! I liked the jumpy-ness of it at the beginning, but then towards the end, it mellows out into a smooth rhythm
I like it! I only have one error though. In the second line, you said the word skippy, but then you repeated it in the fourth line... just change one of them, and then you'll be on your road to perfection. I really enjoyed this quite a bit! Keep writing! BRAVO