Single Breath

by demib

Published February 17, 2012

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Single Breath
Single breath,
My very last breath,
My dieing breath of regret,
For i am always fighting,
Forever fighting my regret,
A single breath,
My very last breath.
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Chrisoh99
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Chrisoh99 commented Comment · Feb 24, 2013

Great!
But you need to add more lines or another stanza. I like the structure. Your poem is organized, but it needs more
Happy Writing,
Chris

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ERZA
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ERZA wrote a review Review · Mar 23, 2012

Short and good I suppose but it is a bit vague but anyway it is good. But one thing, this piece of poem does not look like a piece it rather looks like a part of some other piece and you might want to change that but other than that good work Keep Writing!!



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