Death, Joy, Leaves

by demib
  • March 26, 2012
  • Poetry
  • Realistic · Other
  • Poetry Folder
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Death
Sorrow brings a death,
Funerals sadden people,
Too many sorrows.

Joy
Laughter fill a soul,
With joy and a happiness,
Laugh and sing happily.

Leaves
Leaves a' rustling,
Water softly rushing by me,
Meadows I can see.
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Shakespeare Review
Shakespeare wrote a review · Mon Mar 26, 2012 9:50 pm

Great poems! The only thing that I would change is the last two lines of "Joy." 'With joy and a happiness, Laugh and sing happily." The 'happiness' and 'happily' don't really sound right together... otherwise, nice job, and thanks for the wonderful read! =)



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