I Am The Killer

by demib

Published October 24, 2012

In Poetry Folder

I am the Killer,
The one who finds you without eyes.

I am the Killer,
The one who stalks you without a shadow.

I am the Killer,
The one who kills you without a weapon.

I am the Killer,
The one who disappears without a trace.

I find you without eyes.
I stalk you without a shadow.
I kill you without a weapon.
I disappear without a trace.

I am the Killer...
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Anonymous99
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Anonymous99 wrote a review Review · Oct 26, 2012

Love the idea! Beautifully written, perfectly choosing the right words for each sentence. The end was a bit confusing but a solid poem :) at times the poem lacked a bit of passion and the fear of being hunted... However, I loved the fact that in the stanzas you repeated 'I', it really made a difference and add so much effect to the whole 'monster' idea.also, another positive note is that you never waffled on or made the poem get dull - always interesting sentences! Finally, you're poem was truly scary. You are great at creating suspense and thrills, especially when you put 'I will find you'! Really a pleasure to read. A great piece of work!

demib replied · Oct 28, 2012

Thanks!

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florageis
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florageis wrote a review Review · Oct 24, 2012

I dont know what were you trying to imply in your poem. The poem needs more detail. It looks like you didnt put in enough material that is needed for a great poem. You did recalled all you were trying to say in a pile at the end so we can see what we missed but i did not understand perhaps give a better description?

demib replied · Oct 25, 2012

Ya i wasnt quite sure what i wanted either but thanks for the review



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