My Truth

aouther2b,

Okay I felt like this could really be associated with anyone really. I know that I could equate with this for I lie a lot to people because I don't like all the drama that follows if you argue or speak your mind. Especially if it's someone I don't generally car for.

I didn't spot any spelling errors through out the poem. None that caught my eye anyway.

I thought it was interestong how you related telling the truth with swallowing a pill wirhout water. It was a very interesting idea that was writwn really well throughout the entirety of the poem. Plus it is truthfull.

Very well done, this impressed me. I couldn't see anything wrong with this poem.

Keep up the great work!!

Very powerful work here. I like your style. It's very simple, but also captivating.

So, I would usually yell at you for repeating the word truth so much, but in this case it actually works very well. The main theme of your poem, I think, is that the truth hurts. I like it, and it fits well with the rest of the poem.

I also like the contrast you described between the truth and the lie, how the one normally perceived to be right and better is harsh and bitter on your tongue. Lies, on the other hand, are sweet.

I loved it, especially the ending.

You are one great poet there (allow me to say this) my friend!
Indeed a lot says they are okay when the truth is they are not and they do this because they don't want other people to be burdened by them.

Great work in presenting a very simple truth in such a very creative and captivating way. This is way too cool. I liked the antithesis that you've used in your work, the bitterness of your truth and the sweetness of your lie. You got yourself one catchy line there.

That is really one hurtful experience for you though, being not chosen between the two. Was it really you, or just a friend so dear to you? (Oh, it's really fun to ave some rhymes, sometimes).
Whatever it is, all I can really say is you did a great job and you're indeed a writer.

Continue writing from the heart, it changes a lot of things a lot.
Kudos aouther2b!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow!!

Jack here for a short review. (I like poetry, but suck at reviewing it, though I couldn't resist for this one!)

Well you start the reader of very confusingly, I like that. Its a medium long poem, but it is really well written, and it flowed so perfectly, and there was almost defiantly deep emotion placed in this poem.

I see you are all ready really good at poems, so I'm not going to try and suggest anything you can fix, but really if I tried I couldn't find anything to fix. That was perfect, and it brought tears to my eyes, nearly.

I could understand what your saying, Its hard to explain how that made me feel...

I thank you aouther2b, you just made me day!

Jack.

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