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I fixedthe line you were talking about, or at least i hope i did!
You did excellent on the imagery. I can picture the angel wings perfectly in my mind.
If you read the poem aloud, that line disrupts the flow. I think that if you made that line shorter, it might flow smoother. The rhyme scheme didn't seem at all childish, which I sometimes have a problem with in my own poems.I agree with the other reviewer about this line.
I hope this review was helpful.
Aouther! Hey, I, Alfred the great and marvelous am here to review your very angelic piece, Angel Wings! Prepare yourself! *woooosh*
You've composed a very descriptive poem in such manner that you do describe it, but with the use of figurative techniques which just brings the poem to a high level of intensity! The similes and metaphors there really made it more serene than ever, and let me say, I love how you use them! 
IMPRESSIONS MATTER:
Let's see, Angel Wings. What do people think about when they hear the words? Ah, there it is, in your poem! This is one of the best things I've found in it. You gave the title Angel Wings, and you did give out the topic, Angel Wings. It means that you delivered your goal completely quick! I'm very happy to see that. Giving what readers thought of finding is a very good goal for a poet, you know!
Descriptions. Let's say I'm also happy with this one
RECONNECT, PLEASE!
Okay, so I think the only thing that separates your piece with a Best Poem Prize is its coherence. Look at this set of verses:
See? There wasn't much of a transition. And also, the preceding verses is a bit misleading. Using of, then a verb about the object of that preposition is grammatically a cause of some confusion.
This one, on the other hand, is a bit mismtached. It's too distracting, I think, and it quite breaks the flow of the piece. Some arrangement perhaps?
Well, I think that's all for Angel's Wings. There's so much to feel in it I forgot checking all the technicalities! Hahaha! Anyways, good luck writing!
Your pal,
Al