Do you wish to die peacefully?
At an old age, in a slumber
giving into your years
and then silently slipping under?
Well, when I go it will be a fiery inferno
at the end of a long winded chase
going down with a kaboom and a bang
and then colliding into death's embrace
Because they had tailed me across the globe
but I outfoxed them at every turn
all of their traps and weapons
had been none of my concern
We battled on a rooftop
under a star studded sky
but I took them all on
with a fearsome battle cry
But it all crashed down
the very next day
I was on an airplane home
the very fastest way
But they caught up with me
about halfway there
as the missiles were shot--
I tumbled through the air
I would fall through the clouds
hit the ground with closed eyes
leaving my plane falling behind
through the deep empty skies
I'd go out with a bang
leave the world all divided
the legacy of my name
still undecided
Because I won't die
peacefully in my sleep
I'll live to the fullest
with a memory to keep!
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Hello writer!The first thing i would say is that the flow of your poem is really wonderful. The most special thing about his poetry? It's simple. The magic it creates is beautiful, yet simple. The smiles which he spreads are many in number, and yet, all his work is not complex, it's simple. Simple to understand, but that said, each simple rhyme he creates has a subtle effect. A subtle message. So don't get misguided and take the simplicity for granted. Keep writing and i hope my review in any way was useful to you.
Urvika
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OH this poem was extraordinary. I could visualize every word. I got lost in the words. This made me eager for more the more I read and the way you put it into words was amazing. You are very food at poetry acm. Good job. The flow was good and I felt the power behind your words as I read. I liked the theme and how you stuck to and added more and more to it. Keep on writing and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
I visualized every word.
Your poem is extremely well executed and I enjoyed every word of it.
The meaning is great, good theme (if that's the right word to call it) and honestly, it's something I'd recommend to my friends as a great read.
You've outdone yourself and I hope to read more of your work soon!
Keep on writing!
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