Do you see your life?

Hi Timmy

I can't review this. Too awesome. One of your bestestes for sure.

Uh... bai xD

Hi, Tulip here to give you a review, as requested.

First of all, I never review the same way every time I do a review, so don't feel bad for switching it up on your reviews. So I will do whatever comes to mind, in what ever order it happens to be in. And I do apologize if I am missing any "a's" in my review, my keyboard likes to skip them. So now onto the actual review shall I?

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I loved this poem once I finished. When I started reading this poem, I wasn't to sure that I would want to finish, but then it became more interesting to me, after that. It is one way to show the past, present, and future of everyone's lives. It is an interesting measure.

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The path your wearied feet tread on,

Curving out in ominous silence....

I feel like you could rewrite curving out as curving...so it would read as "The path our wearied feet tread on,/curving in ominous silence." But that's just suggestion.

I will come back to review this. I ran out of time earlier.

Timmyjake!
Wow! Your poem is beautiful. Its full of thoughts that make me reflect. Its like you were actually talking to me that time that I was reading it. The questions relate to each other and leaves thought while continuing to read. Another is the consistency of the descriptions that make it like dramatic!
I like the poem and hope to read more poems like this, keep writing!

Jakey! Pompadour here to leave a quick review! I'll just cut to the chase this time. Technicalities first!


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Do you remember your past?

Revolving around you like a memory long forgotten.

Somehow, I feel as if the second line is a continuation of the first, but the fact that you've used a question mark between them kinda broke the flow for me. I suggest you use the question-mark like this:

Do you remember your past,

Revolving around you like a memory long forgotten?

Or maybe that's just me. I like the idea you've presented to us here. Also, the word "revolving" has always struck me as very beautiful. Good work!

Do you envision your future?

The fantasy you have inside your mind.

A dream that will someday become reality.

Again, I feel as though the periods here just break the flow. Short, concise sentences; it's like there's a different meaning for each of them when we know there isn't. you might want to replace the last period with a question mark here, too.

Curving out in ominous silence

into the distant future.

A fragile wisp of your life forever gone

In the tendrils of history?

This makes me think too much. It's a really great poem and I like how you compare life/time to a path. It makes it somewhat easier to wrap your head around.

I really liked it.

Hey, you have some really effective imagery going on here. I enjoyed this poem because it has a thread to string it along (past, present, future…) and you established your point in the final verse while leaving the reader with a lot to think about.
Awesome writing!
-Briggsy