And the eagles still cry
And fly so high;
And the lovebirds still sing
As they together take wing;
And the jaybirds still fight,
But just out of sight.
And the rabbit still dances
With melodious stances;
And the squirrel still scurries
To escape Winter's flurries;
And the fox is still slinky
And his eyes are still inky.
And the mountain still stands,
So majestically grand;
And the river still flows
While at nighttime it glows;
And the rain still falls,
A consolation for all.
And here I remain
In natures sweet refrain;
And the sound of the cacophony
Blends to one great symphony;
And I submerge myself in sound,
Savoring the peace I've found.
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I love this poem! Especially the rhyming. It gave a really powerful effect to the poem. I also love the voice. It was solemn, harmonious, peaceful and it had a hint of solitude in it. It is really rare also to find solitude in writings of todays writers. I also love the poetic diction. It made it easy for the reader to have a vibrant visualization of the theme in the poem. I love your style and you should keep to it. Nice one!
Hi! I love your poem - very descriptive and very well written! Here's a nitpick:
Lovely poem - you have great talent and some of the decriptions are so chilling. Well done, bravo, and you get a *like* from me!
Thanks,
~ Amelia
"And the lovebirds still sing As they together take wing;" I would make this two lines right after the sing so Its not the only long line in the whole poem. It also will keep the flow better. I can not see any spelling errors or grammar mistakes so that is all the critique I can offer. So onwards, I really loved this and the descriptions are beautiful. Keep up the good work and may you get many wonderful and helpful reviews. Good luck and I shall keep an eye out for more of your works!!! Happy Writing!!!!!!!
Soulkana<3