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Impressive, good imagery, and some clever metaphors in there aswell. I did think it was a bit short though, this proves to be my biggest gripe, just because I was really getting into it when the final Stanza finished. I think if you extended the length this could go from being good, to being great and amazing! Good job mate, keep it up!
I thought this was great! The revulsion that you're trying to show is practically dripping from the poem. I liked that you used a lot of figurative language: metaphors, similes, etc. My only complaint would be about the third stanza. Some of the lines are just a bit too long and throw it off balance. You should probably either choose different, less polysyllabic words, or just break up the lines. All in all, it was a great poem. I look forward to reading more by you, and I hope my review helps.
I liked it, maybe a liitle too short. There's definately a few more describing words than needed and it takes away the meaning of the poem. Good work, dream on!