Rushing as fast as I can...
But will I be on time?
Will my grade end up in the can,
Or will I make it and be fine?
I worked so hard, to have it lost
would be disastrous, I'm not kidding!
But I will get it in, doubt me not...
My vision of success was far from fitting.
Darn.
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I love it because I can totally relate to it. But, somehow I feel like the rhyme in the first stanza is a little forced and the flow in the second was lost because the words had more syllables than those in the first stanza. This is just my opinion though. I still like it because of what the poem actually means especially to students out there.
- I like this whole stanza although I feel like the flow is off.Happy writing!
I think this is a great idea and a good poem, but it could be better.
Rushing as fast as I can...
But will I be on time?
Will my grade end up in the can, You can't really rhyme can with can, I get the double meaning but it sounds too forced and repetitive
Or will I make it and be fine? Again, this rhyme sounds a bit too forced
I worked so hard, to have it lost
would be disastrous, I'm not kidding! This doesn't really flow, it works but not 100%...more like 80%
But I will get it in, doubt me not...
My vision of success was far from fitting.
Darn. I don't much understand the point of this....??
Hahahaha awesome.
Ok, cliche.
"Flitting" should probably be "fleeting."
I'm pretty sure everyone who has been in school at all could relate to this.