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First Impression: Okay, a promising start to chapter twenty five What happened to twenty four...I can't find it anywhere? although towards the end of this particular part, things got a little bit iffy there, and I feel like the story is continuing in the same circle over and over again now.
Anyway let's get right to it,
The Ring of Concealment was an artifact that could completely render its wearer and the people she chose around her invisible. Once you wore it, people couldn’t hear, see, and smell you. It was the perfect stealth tool – Seya loved it. Now it had been broken into two, and half of it was sewn into a necklace while another into another necklace. The effect was still the same. You only needed to dip it into your blood and chanted the ancient Esteese spell.
Felaris gave the other necklace to Veris. ‘Take care of it with your life,’ she said sharply. This was her father’s artifact she stole, after all.
Veris smiled and cloaked himself and Gael. Felaris did the same for Seya, Ilami, and her. It was the weekend’s night. Most of the students had went to their house to spend time with their family. Understandable, given the academy, without interesting classes like combat class, was dull. Silently, they moved toward the Natron’s office, carefully not to touch with other objects – they might be cloaked, but people could still hear when something fell.
OKayy...so it seems they are about to go through with some sort of plan here...not seeing Chapter 24 makes me wonder if we skipped through some important decision, but well, this is a nice little setup to get things off the ground and so far I'm liking this, so let's see where this plan takes us.
They had checked the Natron’s office beforehand, making sure that the priest already left the academy. Kestari usually used the office only when the academy’s events had something to do with his church. He hadn’t been seen entering it since a couple of days ago. Felaris gave her thanks to Wermin, her long-lost goddess, as they arrived in front of the office. Nothing had stopped them so far. Now it was time to break into the room.
The girls and she entered it while Veris and Gael guarded outside. She glanced at Ilami and frowned when she saw Ilami checking her surrounding and biting her lip. Whatever.
She turned to the surrounding in front of her. ‘There should be a door somewhere,’ she said. The place was minimal in decoration. Apart from the obligatory desk, chairs, and a cupboard, there was nothing much in the spacious room. It was for professional use, after all, and one that wasn’t used often. Maybe the Natron preferred his office at the church. There was no way you could guess this was there the experimentation happened.
OKayy, so this a solid little introduction to the environment that they are currently in here...I think you're doing a pretty solid job of introducing that here...and things are going along pretty smoothly for our gang here. I wonder what they will manage to locate this time.
The cupboard revealed a door behind it. Silver-crusted door, with magical patterns adorned all over it. Felaris couldn’t be sure if they were based from Natural letters or ancient Esteese, but she couldn’t care less. She did wonder how Veris could find this door if it took the three of them, all Fighter students, to remove the cupboard. Maybe he used a Lio spell. Dangerous, since earth-based spells generally left a mark.
‘No, you’re wrong,’ Ilami whispered.
What is she talking about?
Seya twisted the doorknob and shook her head. ‘It’s locked.’
Felaris rolled her eyes. ‘As if that’s a problem to you.’
Okayy...so that's a nice little moment there with the two of them. I always love seeing proper moments of friendship between our characters and those have just been in surprisingly short supply as of late.
The door revealed a walkway, wide enough for the three of them. Silver-studded walls led the way to another door. From their angle, it seemed like a five-minutes walk. Other than that, it was nothing. Everything had happened so peacefully. It was too good to be true, but Felaris couldn’t pinpoint out what exactly was off about all of this.
‘Wow,’ Ilami murmured. ‘This – I don’t think this is Natural magic. Or blood magic, even.’
‘It doesn’t matter,’ Felaris said, entering the walkway. Seya followed her while Ilami entered last.
OKayy...well, it seems they're as is very easy to guess, setting foot into what seems to be a very dangerou place that's protected with magic they don't even fully recognize. I can only hope this time no one is going to end up being as gravely injured as they were last time.
Once they opened the door at the other end, Felaris had to laugh. Of course everything had to go wrong. It had nothing to do with the empty, spacious room in front of them. It didn’t scream, ‘We experiment people here!’, which was a disappointment, but she preferred that than having to face the people waiting for them there. Two people she hated the most and would love to kill.
Venaria and Kestari stood in front of them. A couple of Kestari’s priests were behind them, readying themselves for a fight. Combat priests. Surely from the best. They didn’t have a chance if they were to fight them. They’d been cloaked though, so surely from these people’s eyes they were invisible. And that was her eyes caught the ring Kestari wore. Black and white, a contrast to her transparent one. An artifact that could counter hers. The Ring of Enlightment.
Okayy...well this is escalating a little...now it seems we're just going to go up against possibly the worst combination of people you could possibly have to....and it seems they are just going to end up hitting just another low here. This is getting a tiny bit repetitive almost now, it seems like we're stuck in a slight spiral of everything just going wrong...everytime I expect things to have hit rock bottom, it falls a little deeper and I almost wonder if this is going a little too deep now. It just seems like there's no hope given to a reader that anything good could happen now.
Felaris turned to her, eyes sharp. ‘Did you tell your mum about this? Is that why she’s here, waiting for us?’ She walked toward Ilami, steps slow but surely, fist ready to punch her stomach.
Her movement was stopped by a water sphere forming around her, trapping her. It lifted her to the air. The same went to Ilami and Seya. Each of them was trapped with a water sphere. She looked at the priests. One of them was holding his hands out, uttering something. A Serra-blessed spell. Of course.
Kestari clapped and smiled his fake smile. ‘Now, now. There’s no need to be violent here, is there?’
Felaris stared at the thin fluid barrier trapping her. She could chant a spell that created an air blast and pierced it. Serra-blessed people weren’t known as the fighter type. The three of them could fight them – fire and water could make a lethal combination. She wouldn’t let them get her without a fight. She –
Well, Felaris's attitude has gone through some odd changes here and there, but here it seems to match up to what she usually is like...I do like that...although once again, with the level of power on display by the ones these kids are fighting against, I honestly don't quite know how they ever expect to win anything and things are just getting a bit hopeless and a little repetitive with their failures here.
Felaris couldn’t focus on his words. They were so close. She knew for certain they’d arrived to the place Arafel had went. Something must’ve happened in this spacious room. Kestari’s priests must’ve emptied it in anticipation for their arrival. But how? If it wasn’t Ilami who told them, who did? Did someone else outside of their group knew about their plan? How about Veris and Gael? They’d told the boys to alert them if someone was in the vicinity.
The water spheres suddenly shrunk, taking the shape of their hostages until they barely enveloped them. She tried to move her hand, pressing it against the water layer, but to no avail. It stopped her movement.
‘By now, you can only move your legs,’ the Serra-blessed priest whispered.
‘Stop struggling. Do what he said,’ Venaria said, not looking at them.
Oh well....that's a predictable end. I have to say though, by this point, the things going on are a little too repetitive to leave us on a cliffhanger. Its kind of just resigned acceptance at this point, because we know simply expect things to go wrong, there's no hope or any sense that things could potentially improve. They're also obviously not going to be killed or the story wouldn't really be a story anymore, so the stakes kind of just go away by this point, which is not great.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this story is stuck in a sligh spiral at the moment and some parts just feel a little off here and there. Hopefully this next bit can throw something a little more interesting at us. These characters are also getting a lot more angsty and confrontational, and that's a bit of a problem I think. That needs a bit of a check.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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