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First Impression: Okayyy...wow quite the chapter this one. Also...loving note there. Raising their ages seems like a good idea, it makes these more complicated missions they plan and the whole romantic tangles that are about to get underway a little more realisitic and well..this was quite a chapter here now, wasn't it? I have so many questions.
Anyway let's get right to it,
The first thing Gael did after class was to meet Veris. He didn’t exactly know where Veris was, but he did notice Veris was a frequenter in the library, so he went there first. Passing through the counter to the reading tables, he saw Veris deep in reading a thick book, still and focused. Gael sighed in relief.
I hope you’re right about this, Gael thought to Serra.
I am a goddess. Do not question me.
He rolled his eyes. He could point out some of Serra’s actions that were questionable, but it wasn’t the time. As he approached Veris, he suddenly felt… shy. Was it because he never met Veris after the time they spent in his room? Veris was good looking, if not a bit thin. He couldn’t match Haka, though; if Veris was cute, Haka was godly handsome. Thinking of Haka, he sighed. He wanted to wonder how Haka was, but now wasn’t the time either.
Okayy....well it looks like he's trying to put thoughts of Haka on the backburner somewhat and follow up with what the goddess told him to do by seeking out Veris here. Its a very interesting detail to show that he thinks of Veris as attractive and now with Haka and everything that Serra has said regarding how that relationship will turn out you never know what might happen here....that can't just be a random observation that leads to nothing.
He assumed a seat in front of Veris. ‘Hey, Veris.’
Veris looked up to Gael and smiled. He closed the book. ‘Hey, Gael. It’s been a while since I saw you.’
Gael scratched the back of his neck. ‘Um, yeah… I’ve been busy lately. Sorry I didn’t keep in touch.’
Veris shook his head. ‘No need for that; I understand. It’s easy to find yourself surrounded by assignments in this academy. Is there anything I can help you?’
Gael hesitated. How should he start? What exactly did he want from Veris?
Nerecia and Natural magic. Don’t you remember? Serra said.
Okay...I love how Serra now that she's revealed herself has gone from occasionally mystery voice to full on just telling Gael what to do and giving advice and she's becoming quite the character already...well, well, let's see how this conversation will go, Veris remark makes me think these two became better friends during that one discussion earlier than you'd think.
If he could give Serra a death glare, he would. ‘Um, I was thinking if you wanted to talk more about Nerecia and Natural magic. I enjoyed the time we had in my room.’
‘Okay, let’s go then,’ Veris said, rising up.
Gael blinked. ‘Go where?’
‘Your room. To talk about those things.’
That was easy! he thought. ‘Are you sure you can discuss about them now? I mean, I saw you quite absorb in reading the book.’
Oooh...that's quite a move, it looks like Veris wants a bit more of a private chat with Gael...I didn't expect Veris to suggest something like that, but I have a feeling this is going to make things very interesting and perhaps Serra can then guide Gael in discussing more than just about these magics and onto some other important information.
‘Oh, this?’ Veris said, raising the book so that Gael could see the title. Princess Odeta and Her Warrior: The Separation. ‘I can continue with the novel later. It’s pretty good, but it doesn’t hook me that much. The romance is fine, but the story is a bit too character-driven for me.’
‘Ah, it’s a novel,’ Gael said, nodding. ‘You like romance novels?’
Veris blushed. ‘Well… yeah. I like pretty much all kind of novels except for horror. I hope you don’t mind with that.’
Gael shook his head. ‘Oh no, not at all! I just don’t expect you to read novels, but I’m fine with it. My favourite are fantasy novels, though it’s rare for me to find an author that can capture the magical element of the story flawlessly. Like you, I’m also open to other genres, including horror.’ He winked.
Okayy...well that was an interesting little talk on novels. A bit unexpected, but it adds to the realism of the scene quite a bit cause it makes sense that that's the sort of conversation you'd have in the library rather than anything else and to see them having a little bit of a bond over their shared interests in the novel genres was a sweet moment here.
‘It’s hard to mimic real life,’ Veris said, smiling wider. ‘So… are we still going?’
‘Sure, sure! Follow me.’
Once they arrived at Gael’s room, his roommate greeted him, lying on the bed with folded arm as Saeca’s pillow. ‘Hey, Gael,’ Saeca said, a student a year younger than him. Unlike most students, Saeca treated him with respect. The young Scholar student valued his knowledge more than the fact that he didn’t have Natural magic.
‘Do you want me to leave both of you alone?’
Okayy..so we've got a roommate getting introduce, I don't suppose this part will play too much into the story....it doesn't seem like Saeca is too important although he does appear to be one of the few that tend to actually respect Gael among the student population.
‘Um…’ Gael couldn’t remember, to be honest. He was occupied with far more important things than that.
I remember, Serra said. Both of you stopped at the changes Natural started in the country. It was a boring subject. I doubt he remembers it. Tell him about the Naturals’ betrayal, instead. Supposed betrayal, anyway.
‘The Naturals’ betrayal,’ Gael said, barely trusting Serra on this. ‘How Serra, Xesar and Wermin turned their back against Lio, resulting the god to fight them on his own.’
Veris frowned. ‘Is that where we left off? Ah, it doesn’t matter. Records have it that the deities wanted to rule the country anyway they wished and Lio was against that. He argued that despite being gods, they were bound with their rules and laws on how to govern the country. The argument ended up with the deities trying to kill Lio but failed when he managed to kill Wermin and weakened the other two.’
OKayy...well the goddess is basically trying to play a very dangerous game here with this friendship between these two by guiding the topic of conversation where she wants it to really go and I have a feeling this is going to lead to some very interesting views coming out here.
And risk exposing myself as anti-Lio? Gael thought back. Get your emotions in check, Serra. You don’t want to lose your title as Goddess of Wisdom, do you?
‘What do you think, Gael?’ Veris asked, taking Gael out of his conversation with Serra.
‘The deities had it coming. They should know better than to let greed consume themselves,’ Gael said, waiting for Veris’s response and ignoring Serra’s hiss. ‘It’s a pity only Wermin was killed. Xesar and Serra were no better. They should be executed in public.’
Veris was taken aback. He blinked. ‘That’s… an extreme way to put it. Frankly, I don’t think it’s as simple as that. The official record is one version of truth; we don’t know what Serra, Wermin and Xesar thought of Lio.’
Hmm, as extreme of a statement as that is, that is in fact a smarter way to go about getting Veris' true opinion on the matter...its a bit strange that Serra wouldn't see that as the godess of wisdom, but I suppose her judgement is a bit clouded by the personal stake she has in this whole situation.
Gael frowned, pretending to take offence. ‘Are you saying the government might lie about such important matter?’
Veris shrugged. ‘I’ve studied other religions, not just Nerecia. Sometimes, there are people who use them to gain influence and power. And one of the deceptive ways is to provide a version of truth that suits them.’
This guy is smart, Serra said. Gael could envision her nodding. Pity he gets Lio’s blessing. He can be an exceptional my-blessed student, though I don’t think fighting fits him.
Gael smiled. It was evident now that Veris didn’t take the government’s words in face value; he actually had the scholarly mind to question and consider everything. Serra’s evaluation of Veris was right; why did he enroll as a Fighter student? It was obvious he was born to be a Scholar student instead. Gael could have great debates with him.
Hmm, well it looks like whatever test these two wanted to give Veris he at least managed to trick his way into passing it so...well I have no idea where this little tentative situation might go but the initial suspicion I had on Veris from that first meeting is still there but so far it looks like these two might actually become good friends soon.
Gael felt heat rushing to his cheek. Could it be possible Veris was flirting with him? Could someone like Veris exist? ‘Hahaha. Charming isn’t the best way to describe me.’
Veris leaned forward. ‘In my opinion, someone who is knowledgeable and humble and doesn’t think those qualities make him charming is charming.’
Yes, his cheek was definitely getting hotter. He gulped. ‘If - if you think so, I guess.’ He leaned back, his instinct telling him Veris was no longer just a student but was instead a predator. He didn’t know how to handle this kind of predator. And… he didn’t think he wanted to.
Hold on a minute....the room just get a few degrees hotter all of a sudden...I had a feeling that description earlier was going to do something...but not this fast, it looks like Veris is sort of coming on a little hard here, its hard to say if maybe Gael having currently lost Haka and with Serra's less than encouraging comments is a weak position in that department at the moment but he's getting a little overwhelmed here for sure.
‘I’ve been watching you for a long time, Gael,’ Veris said, his voice turning low. ‘And I’m not going to lie: I like what I saw. You aren’t just a student - you are something more.’ Veris’s eyes - for Serra’s sake, they were gleaming! Gael could hear his breath now as Veris leaned closer and kissed Gael.
Gael couldn’t think of anything except the realization this was his first kiss, and with a guy, no less. He could taste Veris’s mouth. Veris’s hand ran through his hair, pulling him closer to their kiss. Veris’s other hand circled his waist. Every touch was electricity foreign to Gael. The experience was pure bliss. Veris’s fresh scent amplified every moment, making him want more.
Oh that just topped everything I could possibly have though of although hmm, Gael's reaction is a little unexpected. Veris going in for the kill there with a kiss makes sense but Gael responding so positively and not once remembering Haka...seems a little unlikely. I would expect him to still kiss Veris back but at least have one or two guilty thoughts. Also dang, Veris...did you have any chats with Mrs. Veneria recently...cause that was fast and effective, and I can't help but think Veris is potentially the new spy and he's not going to be someone like Ilami who will tell Gael he's being spied on.
Eventually, Veris broke the scene. Both of them breathed heavily. ‘I think we should stop here,’ Veris said, though his eyes still reflected hunger.
Gael smiled and grabbed Veris’s hand. It still felt surreal. ‘I’m sure there’s another time,’ he said, taking a risk to be bold.
‘Of course,’ Veris replied.
I shouldn’t be forced to witness this intimate moment, Serra said. I should put in a feature in this possession spell that allows me to turn away form this.
First of all...Serra, you're a goddess who is possessing a teenage boy, you should've never gone through with this without including that feature...but also this is hilarious and a interesting little junction to split this chapter at...I can't wait to see how the rest of it goes.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, I think you've done a great job on developing this little scene, the only little issue I have is the lack of Haka thoughts towards the end, but ooooh, this is a rather interesting development and I can't wait to see what happens next.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
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Harry
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