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First Impression: Alright...I think this is a nice little end her to this piece. You've really gone in nicely to establish the situation around Haka very clearly. I thought it'd be more shrouded in mystery but I like that the characters figured this out quickly and now we end with a fight that could decided a lot of things just getting underway. Its a great moment here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Ilami huffed. Hard. She was barely standing. Seya laid in front of her, beaten, but still conscious. After counting to ten, Mr. Haifei announced ‘And the victor goes to Ilami’ with a dead voice, underwhelming her win as if it wasn’t something to be proud of.
Ilami thought she had every reason to boast her win. Seya was a tough opponent. Her speed, imbued with Wermin spells, would definitely seal Ilami’s fate. It was thanks to to Mr. Haifei’s classes that she was able to barely avoid her attacks. She had to make sure she didn’t stay still even for one second, because Seya didn’t spare each one from launching an attack on her. It wasn’t surprising, though. Of course Felaris’s friend would be just as formidable as she was. Veris excluded.
Well...this is off to a slightly disappointing start...xD I can see that maybe putting both smaller fights, especially when in this fight there shouldn't be anything special like Haka's changes to highlight isn't required, but I was kind of hoping to see more of this fight..well I guess now we can go right to the finals here.
‘You – you did… well,’ Seya said, breathing hard. She opened her eyes and smiled. ‘Felaris is going to have a hard time -’
‘The victor goes to Haka!’
The crowd roared upon the announcement. Ilami blinked. Haka won, at the end. From what she had seen of him, it wasn’t really surprising. But she had seen Felaris fight too, and there were times when she thought Felaris was better than her. Maybe both of them were above her level. As determined as she could be, she didn’t look forward fighting either of them.
‘No...’ Seya whispered. ‘Felaris’s the top of the class -’
Oh well...that's a good moment here. They definitely have no idea what's actually happened, and just assume Haka happened to be better on the day. I like how you manage to portray the obvious exhaustion from Seya as well and them acting nicely towards after this whole fight is over. Its a good moment, but I have the feeling that is all soon going to be forgotten with what they'll find out about Haka.
Seya saw it too. ‘No...’ She tried to get up, but her back fell to the ground again. Looking at Ilami, she said, ‘Go check on her.’ She was frowning with worry.
Ilami didn’t have to be told that. She jogged to Felaris, the muffled voice of the teachers growing stronger. When she arrived, she had to crane her neck to see Felaris’s state. Her body had bruises on them. It was expected, but her face – it was too pale. It was as if her blood was drained. Ilami didn’t know what Haka had done to her, but she did know it was too much. The sight of Aleveri’s pale face while healing Haka went to her mind. Both images were too similar, it was terrifying.
‘What happened to her?’
Oh..this is not a good sign at all. Haka being restrained is problematic and out of character but not that big of deal, Felaris' current condition however, especially on top of that earlier cliffhanger is a powerful moment that really nails home how much this horrible thing inside Haka has managed to do.
Seya held Ilami’s hand and led her to a nearby tent. The smell of food wafted through the air, spicy and sweet. Seya bought grilled steak, put into a paper bag. They sat at the wooden chairs provided.
‘I think something bad happened to Felaris,’ Ilami said with a low voice. ‘Haka must’ve done something to her.’
‘You think so?’ Seya whispered between bites. ‘She looks that bad?’
Ilami nodded. ‘Whatever Haka did to her, she wasn’t expecting it.’ She stopped there, leaving Seya to catch the underlying meaning of her words.
Seya’s eyes widened. ‘He was experimented, wasn’t he? It’s for real then? He becomes something else?’
‘I’m not sure… Both of us didn’t see how their match went. Maybe –’
Hmm, well it seems these two don't take long to come to the right conclusions and that's not surprising considering the things that they already know...hopefully whenever Ilami ends up having to fight Haka things aren't going to turn out nearly as badly. Also I love seeing how Ilami and Seya's friendship seems to have slowly developed here.
‘We suspected that much,’ Ilami said, nodding to Seya. ‘We didn’t see the match though –’
‘We did, and – he wasn’t like himself,’ Gael said, talking rapidly as if he couldn’t bear keeping the words any longer. ‘I saw him fight many times. One thing I know for certain about his fighting style is that its careful and precise. When he stopped Felaris’s sword with bare hands, I knew something changed. Something happened to him.’
The sight of Gael pained Ilami. His words poured out like a Scholar he was, but there was a tremor in his voice. His hands were shaking. He was talking about his best friend turning into something he couldn’t recognize, and it was clear he was struggling inside.
Well, there's definitely no denying the massive emotional impact a moment like this would happen on Gael and honestly probably even the others. Haka was a friend after all and to see him be someone entirely different and so violent has to be a scarring experience...eeesh, well its all now fully confirmed, hopefully they fix it before its too late. And also now I'm really starting to wonder what Serra's comments might be on this whole thing.
‘This isn’t the time to be emotional,’ she finally said, though the words tasted bitter. ‘What happened after he made the heart stopper?’ Heart stopper was the term for Haka’s action of stopping Felaris’s sword with his hands.
‘They both stayed still for a while, before Haka, inexplicably, managed to kick Felaris a few meters away. She fainted right after. That was the end,’ Aleveri said.
Seya didn’t say anything about this for a few seconds before she frowned. ‘That’s weird. Felaris can easily endure a few kicks.’ She hesitated. ‘But then again, no normal Fighter can kick someone away that far.’
Huh...fainting is definitely an odd way to end a fight when she's just been kicked. I would expect more like being knocked unconscious...I wonder if Felaris purposely did something so that she wasn't going to get any more injured...its hard to say I suppose...well, this is really taking off into some dangerous territories here.
Ilami remembered when she checked on Felaris. ‘Her face was pale, I saw it. It was like her blood was all drained.’
Gael blinked. ‘Drained?’
Ilami nodded.
He frowned, deep in thought. ‘Maybe...’ He shook his head. ‘When you fight him, Ilami, force him to go into that – that enhanced state as soon as possible. And don’t let him beat you once he assumes that mode.’
Well...that's just...yeah no...these are some scary descriptions here, all of which seem to suggest that poor Felaris herself might be in a medical situation bad enough for her to also get dragged into this experiment, that could well have been the plan for these people running all these things behind the scenes. That teacher shooing away Ilami and rushing to get Felaris is definitely a red flag.
‘Why?’
All eyes turned to him. He bit his lip. ‘I have… a suspicion. But I’m not sure about it yet. Just – prolong the fight as much as possible. It’s okay if you lose.’
‘No,’ Ilami said immediately.
‘Why not?’ Aleveri asked.
Seya raised her eyebrow as if she was asking, ‘You haven’t told them yet, have you?’
Aleveri would get mad if she knew Ilami was hoping her victory would gain her an answer on where the experimentation was held. She would certainly do anything she could to prevent Ilami from getting there. She’d put herself in trouble. Ilami didn’t have much time to think about it, so she just gave them the answer they would be satisfied with.
Well...now that's quite something....it sees she hasn't told Aleveri or Gael anything about that particular part of her plan for this test and only told Felaris, I suppose that isn't exactly surprising considering what we were told about her behavior prior to all of this. And well...I guess know she's going to lie to them and then risk her life for all this anyway.
‘Mother said I’d put the XieZhi family into shame if I lose,’ she said, the words coming out as natural as if Mother actually said that. She didn’t, but Ilami suspected the family would be put into shame if she lost.
‘I see,’ Seya said, wearing a poker face that would earn her an award for acting. ‘Well, you have about half an hour left to rest. I think you should prepare for him.
Wel...half an hour doesn't seem enough there, if Seya was looking as injured as she did there, Ilami is probably only marginally better off so if she's going to go up against Haka who can do all of that, she's going to need a few hours of rest at least...oh well, hopefully Ilami can survive whatever will happen. I also love this excuse, its technically not even a lie, her mother didn't mention those exact words, but she did tell her to do well on the test.l
Mr. Haifei repeated the words he had memorized. ‘The rules are simple. You may use magic, but only Natural magic. Your challenge is to beat your opponent; any attempt to achieve result beyond that will disqualify you automatically. You may use weapons, but only those that you learn in the class. If neither one of you concedes after half an hour, the judges -’ he nodded to Venaria, Kestari and Mrs. Reva – another teacher specialized in combat – sitting among the audience ‘- will choose the winner.’ He nodded and announced, ‘You may start.’
Before Haka uttered his spell, Ilami finished hers first. Fire spiraled around her on the floor, growing and growing until it consumed their entire battlefield. Haka was forced to put a wall of earth around him to protect himself. The flame grew bigger, ravishing the grass and creating smoke. Haka couldn’t manipulate the ground to favour him, as he deserved.
Ilami’s heart was on fire, and she would give her all to kill whatever monster residing inside Haka.
Well...the fight is on....I really love this choice of ending here. Its a lovely little cliffhanger and now we really must know more here. A powerful moment in the story and I love it. I only hope that its whatever horror inside Haka that ends up damaged and not Ilami herself or even just the not so violent Haka that's probably trapped within whatever they've done to him.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, I think we're off to a great start here. I can't wait to see what will happen next. This was such a cliffhanger. Its a great setup. And oooh, I also see that I'm now getting so close to catching upto the present finally. Got to chapter 20, just six more to catch up properly
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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