Young Writers Society

Hellooo! I really enjoyed this poem, so I figured I could give you a little review ^-^

So, like usual I'm going to give my interpretation (although this one is less abstract than some others I've seen on here, so it's mostly clear). The speaker seems to be someone in an abusive relationship who is trying their hardest to make it work and help their partner (doing all the literal work/chores, as well as the emotional work trying to maintain the relationship), but in return, they receive nothing. I really love the progression of the poem as the speaker realizes their efforts are futile, and especially as they decide no one will help them, so they must help themself.

Now into the details! You use great allusion throughout the poem, especially your references to fairy tales, like when you compare the speakers isolation to that of Rapunzel's, or basically the entire fifth stanza. I also really enjoyed the subtle slant rhymes throughout, like "you" and "shoes." I think you also did a great job conveying the mixed emotions associated with being in an abusive relationship. There's a sense of desperation and hopelessness near the beginning of the poem, that gradually shifts towards frustration and anger.

One critique is just with the grammar of the line "So I give up on fairytales long ago." It doesn't feel right to me being present tense, so you might want to change it to "gave."

Overall, I really enjoyed this, so great job! ^-^

This poem sounds like it’s connected to a very interesting story.I liked reading this short and fun poem you made.I thought that you described this character in the poem very well.Hee feelings and frustration of what they’re doing for the other person never,ever being enough,no matter what they do and how many times they do it is written nicely here.I hope you have a good day and night.