Young Writers Society

AnimalQueen here! I'd just like to say this was a great poem, but I really think it would be better longer. I want to hear more details!

Also, I am personally more of a Rocky road person, but I respect your tastes. (No pun intended.)

That's about it, so the now! AnimalQueen out!

what in the what

this is the first yws poem I've willingly read in a long time and it's getting strange already lol

I'm more of a strawberry guy, but I approve of your vanilla stuff. vanilla is cool as fricc

Hiya! Berri here with a review!ヾ(●・◇・●)ノ

I relate to this poem on a deep personal level. Vanilla is objectively the best flavor out there!!! I'm really happy that it's getting some attention. Cherry? Bleh. Gross. Vanilla? Yes. I'll take vanilla anything any day. This haiku is super cool!

am I allowed to frame this on my wall

So as you can probably tell, I'm a huge fan of vanilla. I really love the simple wording you used here, too!

There was nothing wrong with it error-wise either, so that's also amazing! Good job! There is one thing I suggest though-

Sweet? How about delicious?

Sweet- how about delicious?

Sweet? How about delicious?

Please feel free to ignore my advice, it is not intended to offend you or hurt you, or to demean your story or make it seem bad, but brace yourself for hurt regardless of what I have stated and have my full apology for any hurt this may have caused
that said . . .
1. What I liked
I liked how you describe vanilla it makes me think about it. I also loved how your obvious passion for the flavor shines through.
3. Length and Interest
This part may offend you most of all, so be warned but I really think that this is too short. To short for someone to get into. I really feel like you should add more to it then what you have, it might perk up your readers interest rates more.
4. Flow and style
Once again beware of the offender factor! I'm not calling you a bad poet I can feel it in my bones that you are a good one but somehow that didn't shine through here. It didn't seem like real poetry-well maybe it wasn't classical still . . .not alot of style.
5. Overall & Encouragment
Regardles of my honesty about this and feel free to cast aside rude reviews I didn't intend for it go come out that way-I really liked this despite the problems. It showed so much but is so little. Keep up such amazing work.

Radrook here to provide another review with the intention to help others make their poem better and to provide advice that might prove useful fr other compositions that they might write in the future. If indeed any offense is taken for anything that I say. please accept my apologies, it was not intended,

That having been said::

Thanks for the opportunity to read and provide feedback for this syllabic poem about vanilla written in the Haiku which is syllabic verse. For those unfamiliar. syllabic poetry only requires that a set number of syllables per line be used.

Syllabic verse is a poetic form having a fixed or constrained number of syllables per line, while stress, quantity, or tone play a distinctly secondary role — or no role at all — in the verse structure. It is common in languages that are syllable-timed, such as Japanese or modern French or Finnish — as opposed to stress-timed languages such as English, in which accentual verse and accentual-syllabic verse are more common.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Syllabic_verse