Side Effects

That was really good. It was interesting that you chose this topic. Very unique. Why did you choose it????? And why did you say that it caused pleasure when "blood drips from the skin"? That makes me think of a nutty psycho.

I really liked the poem. The message behind it was great. I don't if it's suppose to be like a free write poem thing(Sorry not that good at poetry), but it sort of stops flowing after, "Skin cut and overdose." I feel like you can connect your sentences better, and try to make it flow. Just some friendly advice. Great work though.

I liked the darkness in the narration, the feelings portrayed and how it gets to the audience something many people go through. Though, I would like to answer the question in it with "But it would be way worse not to suffer at all" or to add another question like "at the end, does it matter/is it worth it?".

The flow was very good and I liked the idea. It's relatable and dark but you didn't go into enough detail for it to be triggering which was very good. People always seemed to make a weak argument or go into triggering depth. It was dark and angsty without being whiney or anything. I really enjoyed the poem and your poetic style. It was very dark though and I hope that it wasn't to personally based and if it is I hope you're managing it and are getting better.

I could really feel the pain and agony that the character must have been experiencing. It sounded like the character had finally hit the braking point after a long time of struggle. I really liked the depth of feeling that was portrayed. I suggest ending with a ray of hope or even something that has a little bit of happiness. A persons life can't be all full of despair. Even though that might be all they can remember there is always a time or memory of some happiness. A ray of hope. All in all pretty good.