Peas, carrots, broccoli, Brussel sprouts
Yuck, just give them to the dog.
Cake, cookies, pies, chocolate
Yummy, let’s eat it all.
Oh, the child inside me.
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Haha, cute!
You named my four favorite veggies XD.
Hello Kanome, Selina here to review some of your work!
I loved this poem, mostly because I'm a kid at heart my self and can completely relate to this *proud grin* I also have a ton of nephews and nieces and each one of them has gone through this stage, I don't think anyone really gets out of it to tell you the truth. They just pretend to like the yucky food because their supposed to be adults =P
A couple tiny mistakes, - 'Brussel' doesn't need to be capitalized. And after 'brussel sprouts' there should be a comma. That's all I have. That's all I could see. *BIG THUMBS UP FOR ADMITING TO STILL BEING A CHILD AT HEART* Now I'm not the only one who is proud of it! xD =P
Anyways, love it!
~Celtic Thunder1438
Heya, Chrissy here for a review!
It's too short to find any really big mistakes. Well, guess I can try anyways.
Are you aware how hard it is to review something like this?
I think there should be a comma on the end of this, and the same goes for the other one that doesn't have anything. Also, brussel sprouts doesn't need to be in caps.
Well, that is it for that, but I do have a suggestion if you want to write more on this. Maybe you can talk about chores, or schoolwork? Everyone loves those, right?
And I definitely agree with you. No more rabbit food! Give me chocolate or die!
Keep writing!
Haha, cute!
A cute and simplistic poem. But It's so short that It's hard to write a review! Okay, so all kids usually hate these things, but you have such a broad title, so It should be more about all the things that children are typically about. Or, make your title more specific. That's about all I need to say. But other than that, It's short and sweet. Good work.
Hey.
Hoping to see it soon.
What even? :p I do understand this was sooo out of boredom haha. I don't even know what to say now lol.
Ok so, great topic. Really, I still do it :3 But anyways, why don't you work on it? Like, make it a real real poem? Won't it be greaaattt?
Keep writing and stay blessed.
xoxo
I totally agree, but be sure to leave some carrots. Otherwise bugs bunny can't do his "what's up doc?"