Hello Kanome! I would like to review your poem. Is that okay? Okay. First off I LOVE THIS POEM!!! Second I think you'd look more professional if you capitalized the first word of every stanza. It's standard English. Third you could shorten the title a bit, it would make the poem stand out more. Fourth......this is my last one xD.....fourth look at stanza:
Sometimes, we are close
we laugh and enjoy each other's company
you always made me smile,
to where I want you around everyday of my life.
This seems a little odd take this and put it into one sentence without the fancy placement: Sometimes, we are close we laugh and enjoy each other's company you always made me smile, to where I want you around everyday of my life. Can you see all the run-ons? I would change it to:
Sometimes we are close.
We laugh and enjoy each other's company.
You always made me smile,
And I still want you around everyday of my life.
That way people don't get bombarded with all those thoughts.
~Nunyabusiness
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