Young Writers Society

A good play on "men made of glass."
But the title "Stop-start" confused me as to how it's related... ?

One of my favorite lines:
"when I break I tend to shatter"
because, once again, it plays off of your "men made of glass" ending.

Like monster mentioned, I too enjoy stanzas with equal number of lines but
*shrug* it's up to you I guess.

When you talk about people staring through you,
how does that relate to your blood trying to "burst through"
What emotion is there? Anger?

I like the ending.

"I met an old enemy last time,
but men made of glass shouldn't start fist-fights"

I didn't understand it at first, but then I got it.
And it was cool.

Little Monster here to review!
I did not understand this poem.
Isn't it morals that if you need to separate a poem then you should put it in stanzas with the same number of lines for each stanza? It makes the poem easier to read and understand.

I sometimes go to a nightclub
because it's the only place I know that's dark
enough that people see past me rather
than look through me,
and loud enough that I'm able to hear my thoughts

but you can't.

I sometimes go to a nightclub
because it's the only place I know that's dark
enough that people see past me rather
than look through me,
and loud enough that I'm able to hear my thoughts,
but you can't.

but the problem is that when I break I tend to shatter.