Interesting piece. Seriously. Its nice.
Devoid of feeling,
Nice beginning. Its strong, urging the reader to move on.
Seeing only black and white.
Here, it gets a little tangled. This might not be true to others, but when you put the last two sentences in, it almost doesn't fit in with the first.
Sorry, but that may not be true. Its an opinion. NO fact.
A hallow being.
That one line makes this poem glow.
But I have to say, the line:
Seeing only black and white.
This one line is lovely. It really shows detail, but sadness, even though its not sad. That is what make's you an wonderful, amazing and fantastic writer.
I don't think I would ever be able to write this good.
Ignore the people in the world that don't like this.
I think its the best of the best. Trust me.
Keep up this amazing work. A lovely story like this should be shared to the whole world.
Farwell, TimmyJake!
I would like you to review my poem, called Tears of Rainbows.
(I think I may like your help!!)
Once again, amazing. Totally.
Farwell again,
Curioity227. *Clap, Clap, Clap*
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Reviews: 18
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