Ok I have seen so many poems on this site saying something about "I tried" and it gets to the point where it is overused and bears not meaning, especially personal. The try and cry rhyme is completely clich in this sense.
Ok so I stared with some harshness but overall I liked the poem. I liked the fact that you adressed each member of the family and there are some lovely lines in there.
When writing sad poetry you really have totough and connect to the reader. This seems personal to the narrator but for a reader this just had no impact on me. I didn't really feel anything. You need to work on the relationship you make through the words. You need toforce the reader to care.
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