Hi Harry here for a review:
I loved how this poem makes you feel the words more than reading like this part:the breeze
Feels cool on your face.
***
The wind, it whistles.
You hear it, rushing,
Like it's running from something.
***
The trees, dance with the wind.
Moving their branches from side,
To side.
***
The clouds in the sky,
Move in beat with the wind.
The sun shines bright, on all.
***
The grass is green,
Bright green,
Just as it should be.
this shows that you will always feel the spring in the air and you will smile when you feel the sun and the breeze. this is perfect because spring is my favorite season. It makes me smile when I see someone with so much passion for something so beautiful. You make me smile and I like that about a poem. You need to try to get the words to rhyme more. I like this part of the poem the most: The grass is green,
Bright green,
Just as it should be.
***
As I'm looking out the window,
I see all these things.
"Isn't spring wonderful." I say.
This shows how much you love to gaze out the window at the beautiful day. This shows your character is warm hearten and strong with a down to earth personality. you can always read people like that, just by their writing style and smile when they see how many people like their writing because that shows who they are. And I am telling you that I like your work and I will continue to read them. Keep up the good work and Happy Writing:)
Points: 102
Reviews: 29
Donate