Young Writers Society

Hello CapitalMonday here for review. i like to begin on how many people could relate to what you have written since good-bye could take some time but sometimes a good-bye is needed on the spot (or why is saying good-bye even a thing.) I enjoyed how you used examples from real-life to make a point as to why everyone is feeling rushed since when you are rushed, you never get to do anything you want to do.

When i read over this poem (like the ones i read before this one), i try to look for problems that seem to be fixed or maybe the poet needs help correcting something. However, when i read this poem i don't see anything wrong with it, only that the two stars after every stanza seems that they do mark of stanzas or something.

Overall, I think i can agree with poem since i feel rushed most of my life. like what if i have to do homework, that is due tomorrow or maybe i wanted to review all day but the day went by too fast (that's why i believe people say on the weekends, that it seems that they was no weekend at all, as if the days of weekend are forever lost in forever world or never coming back home.) Sorry if i rambled

Farewell,
CapitalMonday

Hi!!

I have really enjoyed this poem! It tells me that people should slow down to see the good parts of life. For example, if you slow down while taking a hike, you could see some animals you may never be able to see again. I did notice that it didn't always rhyme which didn't give it a very good flow. Other than that, it delivered a great message to the reader. It gave me a lesson that has taken effect on my life.

Keep on writing!

Love,
**Jojoann1**

Heyo! PonyzandPokez here to review your poem about time. Here's what I thought of it!:
okay, first correction, you rhymed rushed with rushed and that's not right, it's not excepted. sorry.... you can probably use something else for this. That was all I found. Here's your rating:
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This was a wonderful poem about Time as it implies but there's not much emotion and sometimes the Grammar of this poem got the best of you. I still love it though. I hope you keep writing things like this but you have to make sure to rhyme different words each time. Keep writing You have a talent you just need to embrace it
I really enjoy your writing and I hope I get to read more soon.
~PonyzandPokez

I will start with the negative just to get it out of the way: your writing pattern is a little off and didn't flow very well. That being said, the concept of the poem was very thoughtful. We really do go through life without ever making time to care about those around us. I'm not saying that everyone does this. But it's good to be aware of. I really hope many more people read this because it could change the way people view their lives.

I'm going to be honest with you, here. This wasn't the best I've ever read. But that doesn't mean it stinks. It has potential.

In the first stanza, you rhymed "rushed" with "rushed". Now, I'm not a perfect poet, but I don't think that's generally accepted.

Your second stanza is good. I like it.

The third line in your third stanza should be shorter. It has to do with rhythm, or beat, or something.

Your next two stanzas are notable for featuring the word "rushed" again. I'd look up some synonyms for that word if I were you, or rename this poem "Rushed".

The final stanza is good. I'm irked by "him/her". I know it's more grammatically correct then "them", but it's all about flow.

This has potential, but should be fixed up a bit.