Okay, per your suggestion I decided to read this. And I was so pleasantly surprised! I thought this was adorable. It seriously took me back to when I was younger and made my first friends... granted I don't have a best friend from childhood.. but it still had that effect on me all the same
I only have two suggestions, and they are as follows:
"I was sad, and didn't want to leave you." - this line is much longer than the rest. I would suggest shortening it in some or or other. But that's totally up to you.
"And that's when I realized we were best friends." - This has the same issue. I would reccomend shortening this as well.
So, overall, I loved this poem. It was super simple, and yet super cute as well! You're truly a poet
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