Hello, priceofwords here!
This was such a sweet poem! A very sad story, but with a lot of meaning behind it. The first stanza,
'She never found her dream job,
But she found true love.
she sent her man a message,
From her pet bird, a dove,'
was definitely my favourite, as I loved the mention of doves in there! I also love the rhyme scheme you incorporated, and I'm puzzled as to why you didn't keep it going as it would have given your poem great rhythm.
I would also suggest shortening the line,
'How he was tall and skinny with the nice dirty blonde hair,'
As it doesn't coincide with the average syllable count in the rest of the poem at all.
Apart from this, your poem was great and I look forward to reading more of your work!
Keep writing!
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