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Writing Like I'm Running Out of Time

by alpacaboss


How do you write like you’re running out of time?

Making sure every sentence of your poem rhymes?

Putting down incoherent ideas of a story,

Making sure that the result isn’t boring?

After working day and night with the hope

To be able to cope with the slippery slope

Of college’s worries and troubles,

I want to sit and blow bubbles

Popping them till my worries vanish,

Chomping on a sweet cinnamon danish

Till my stress seems to wear away.

Writing is a way to tell what I want to say,

While I imagine burying myself in a fluffy duvet.

But not today it seems, anyways.

I cannot avoid the load in front of me;

My teachers have a homework-giving spree,

If not homeworks, then through heaps of lessons

With loads of information to absorb ev’ry session.

All to amount to a couple of tests

And final projects, you know the rest.

With grades to determine if pass the term

Waiting for that is the worst, I can confirm.

But I decide for now, for my sanity

I’ll write a bit as a break from reality.

Even if it takes a bit of creativity,

Making stuff like these makes me happy.

Maybe after all this hiatus is done,

I’ll relax and enjoy some sun.

Now, I’ll just write a little story,

Before facing my studies in all its glory.

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Unimportant fun fact: I imagined Lin Manuel Miranda rapping in my head and combined my current (and imagined) stress with school to brew up this funky poem HAHAHA


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Mon Jun 05, 2023 8:38 am
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Hi, mango here with a quick review!
No one else mentioned this but I felt your choice of theme to explore was really interesting, which is like meta-writing in a sense.
I like the gradual change of mood throughout the poem, where at the start one feels overwhelmed and horrible, like sitting under a mountain of stress and anxiety.
Afterwards though the mood gets uplifted which was really nice and rather unexpected.
The tone and use of language contributed a lot to the funky and unorthodox vibe of the poem which was a breath of fresh air compared to usual others. The language was direct and conversational yet slightly unsually, making for the inclusion of a casual vibe as well.
Overall this was a really cute poem which you don't see often.




alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review! Really appreciate your comments on the poem :D



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Fri Jun 02, 2023 2:19 pm
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hello! momo here with a review.

i like this poem a lot! it definitely was giving hamilton vibes which i am HERE for. i love how the whole poem feels rushed, stressed, and frantic. your rhymes are amazing, and as someone who can't rhyme, you have my respect. oftentimes stressful environments produce beautiful art, and you demonstrate that very well in this poem.

the only critique i have is that some of your rhythms and rhymes feel a little forced, but it is very difficult to get enough words to make a clean rhythm per line.

that's all i have to say! this poem is excellent; keep up the good work.
momo




alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review! thanks for pointing out that some of the rhythms and rhymes feel a bit forced, I know where to improve now heh
Have a great day/night!



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Sun May 28, 2023 6:54 pm
AkuRashomon wrote a review...



Hey there! I saw you review my poem so I am going to review yours too c:. If you don't remember me, this is Ina aka loveissourgrapes and I am here to review/comment about your poem here. I saw it and it reminded me of Hamilton the Musical. I watch it a few days ago (not in real life though, just the movie) so yeah, I am glad I have gotten to read a poem about it. Anyways, let's get straight to the point of my review.

First impressions. I thought it was going to be like a really sad story and something that feels slow. But it actually feels better when you read it fast, like listening to Lin Manuel Miranda hihi. Sometimes, I do write stories and poems about school and stress before even doing it in the middle of the night. I write my scary thoughts too so they can go away in the middle of the night too. This can seem related to my recent poem A peaceful sleep so yeah. I do like it. I like your writing style too.

I love relatable poems and writings here on this site especially when they are written by my peers. It feels nice to know you are not alone when you feel like this. Because other people do too. Overall, it is good. Keep on writing poems. I love 'em! I hope you are okay right after writing this. Have a good day/night too!




alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review!

As I say to my friends I have a goldfish memory, but do not worry I remember you :D

Im glad you are able to relate to the poem and enjoy it! Have a good day/night! %u263A%uFE0F



alpacaboss says...


:)



AkuRashomon says...


you're welcome! c:



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Sat May 27, 2023 6:08 pm
KocoCoko says...



Hiya! It's Koco (or Coko) here for a simple review!

First thing I noticed- I see someone here is a Hamilton fan. Haha, don't worry. I haven't listened in years and yet I remember every word.
As a fellow student and (boarderline obsessive) writer, I really feel this one. It's almost jarring seeing it put down on a page, reading it, and then realizing I didn't write this. It's nice to know that there are others out there who feel this and literally think "I need a break, let me write a bit."

So, overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this. It's a nice, simple piece about being a student and writer. Writing is always a nice escape for schoolwork, especially since you can get on Google Docs on a school computer and no one will say a thing.
I hope you have a wonderful day! (And that your workload becomes a little lighter soon :) )




alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review! I%u2019m glad that it was relatable :D

Thanks for wishing me well for school! I wish you and all the people who see this poem well with their school or work too!



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Hiya! It's Koco (or Coko) here for a simple review!

First thing I noticed- I see someone here is a Hamilton fan. Haha, don't worry. I haven't listened in years and yet I remember every word.
As a fellow student and (boarderline obsessive) writer, I really feel this one. It's almost jarring seeing it put down on a page, reading it, and then realizing I didn't write this. It's nice to know that there are others out there who feel this and literally think "I need a break, let me write a bit."

So, overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this. It's a nice, simple piece about being a student and writer. Writing is always a nice escape for schoolwork, especially since you can get on Google Docs on a school computer and no one will say a thing.
I hope you have a wonderful day! (And that your workload becomes a little lighter soon :) )




alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review! I am happy to hear that it was relatable :D

Thanks for wishing me well for school! I wish you and all the people who see this poem well with their school or work too!




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