I wish you would stop.
I wish you would stop liking me.
It's probably for both of our good.
You're a good friend, but nothing more.
It's not that I hate being around you.
Or that your looks are an eyesore.
It's simply because I don't think
That's what our bond was built for.
I know you care for me.
And I care for you too.
But how many times
Do I need to explain to you?
There are times
Our views don't align
There are times
You'll do things out of line.
Friendship is the only way this could work
That's why I keep insisting it.
Because it's the only logical way
The only option I see fit,
For us to have a lifelong bond
And to be on good terms with one another
You wouldn't want us in the end
To be strangers.
Please think, please want to find someone new.
Please stop. I'm telling you.
I wish we could stay friends and it makes me think...
What if you never fell for me?
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Hey there!
This is a fantastic opener. The direct address and the simplicity of it are so striking, and immediately convey a sense of exhaustion and resolve. I am drawn into the dynamic - it feels very intimate and very charged and (appropriately) stops me in my tracks.
I do think the next two lines, unfortunately, are a step down. 'It's probably for both of our good' is a bit clunky, and the vagueness of it dissolves a lot of the energy built up by your first two lines.
This point is much more subjective and purely my opinion, but I think you've given the game away a bit early. I start the poem with a strong sense of the speaker's emotions, but I don't know exactly what's happening, and that ambiguity is driving me to read on and find out more. But in these lines, you explain everything very precisely and I lose that sense of interest. You could possibly stand to explore the emotions of the piece in a bit more depth before revealing the specifics.
That said, I love the way the poem slips into an every-other-line rhyme scheme - it feels like the verse is settling into this opinion, like this line of thinking is inescapable. That echoes the speaker's feelings about the relationship very naturally, and is a beautiful example of form following function! 'I don't think / that's what our bond was built for' is a lovely turn of phrase with a beautiful rhythm to it, as well.
This is another highlight! 'To be strangers' is considerably shorter than the lines around it, and it gives that sense of something cut off too quickly - just like the relationship would be. Personally, I would consider moving this to the end of the poem and letting that sense of potential loss hang in the air. From 'please think' to 'what if you never fell for me?' could easily be moved earlier, and in some ways fits more naturally with more intense emotion of 'But how many times / Do I need to explain to you?'
Great work!
I like how you decided to write a poem from the other person's point of view as well. The speaker in this poem explains why the speaker from previous poem should move on from his one-sided feelings. I think you describe convincingly how it is better for two friends not to date, no matter how much one might like the other, if their views do no match. A romantic relationship between two such people might end badly and even destroy the friendship they used to have completely. This is a good poem, and I think it follows up on the previous poem very well!