Hi, I really enjoyed reading your work. After I read it, I scrolled quickly through it over and over again and let the words flash in my eyes: "I truly care"/"I feel bad"/"Please"/"Don't shut me out".
I love these "musings" you wrote. I've thought similar thoughts. They were there in my head, but I never knew how to put them into words.
In Entry 2, I like the short and choppier lines because, to me, they convey desperation. It's a desperation similar to when the main character of a dystopian book starts going a bit insane thinking about all the lies they've believed and then wondering what's true or not.
Nothing particularly stood out to me as an area of improvement.
I do hope you continue publishing more of your musings.
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