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Hi! Your neighborhood Angie here to leave a review!
First of all, wow! Your poem touches something that almost everyone can relate to or have related to at one point. I love the rhyme scheme in the beginning of the poem, and how the poem is written in general. One if my favorite parts of this poem is,
"A demand to take a stand, I cannot

For I fear if I choose a side,

I will lose the other"
The rhythm is excellently written, and the sound when read aloud it beautiful. Good job!

Hello!
This is a poignant and introspective piece that explores the internal struggle of an individual caught between the desire to speak their mind and the fear of the consequences that may follow. The poem effectively captures the overwhelming nature of having numerous thoughts racing through one's head, creating a sense of mental chaos and urgency.

The use of imagery and metaphor in phrases like "resonances I wish to never hear again" and "trampled to dust" adds depth to the emotional journey depicted in the poem. These lines convey the speaker's yearning to avoid certain discussions or arguments that have caused them pain in the past, as well as the crushing feeling of having their opinions dismissed or invalidated.

The fear of choosing a side and potentially losing the other is a relatable sentiment for many, as it reflects the struggle to maintain harmony and avoid alienating those around us. The poem delves into the fear of consequences, highlighting the risk of fracturing relationships and descending into isolation.

The speaker's decision to keep their mouth shut, despite the urge to speak out, reveals a vulnerability born out of past experiences. The self-doubt and self-deprecation expressed in lines such as "I’m afraid I’ll start laughing for being too stupid to talk" further emphasize the internal conflict faced by the narrator.

The poem concludes with a sobering reminder of the delicate balance the speaker maintains, walking on a tightrope to avoid potential catastrophe. The fear of one misstep and the resulting collapse echoes the anxiety of navigating social dynamics and the consequences of expressing oneself.

Overall, this effectively conveys the struggle between the desire to speak up and the fear of the potential repercussions. It skillfully explores themes of silence, self-doubt, and the delicate nature of human relationships. The emotions are vividly portrayed, leaving the reader with a sense of empathy and reflection.

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Howdy Hey! Gengar here to leave a review!

I was drawn in by the title; it’s a simple title but it still holds a lot of emotion. Speaking of which, I really liked these lines:

When I hear sentences strung through

Resonances I wish to never hear again

Honestly so relatable, really resonates with me and likely others too. I love the last 2 lines- I find this happens with me often, particularly in school/in public, quite depressing, really. The length is also pretty suitable too- not overwhelmingly tedious and neither too short and therefore simplistic (and this is considering my issue with writing poems- my shortest one is a page long, I think). Perhaps maybe make it slightly more subtle- better for more varied interpretations, in my opinion (although this is coming from someone who loves analysing writings and trying to understand complex topics.) Overall really liked this- please write more

Hi, hello! This is Ina, also known as loveissourgrapes, and I am here to review your story. It's been awhile since I reviewed it on my phone, so yeah. I am sorry if you'll see a lot of typos 😅. Anyways, let's get into it.

First impressions. Ohh, a new poem of a new writer in this site, in the literary spotlight, too. Congratulations! I mean, this poem deserves it. It is very nice because I have never thought of our way of thinking and how our thoughts are made like this. It is also very creative, and this poem is like this that made you think it over and read it again.

Then, I read it again. It seems to be very sad, though. You just keep your mouth shut so you don't say anything to hurt someone you love or cause things to go bad. Then, if someone tells you to talk more, you just nod and smile because you feel like if something goes out of your mouth, it'll hurt them. The line, "but it's best to stay on the tightrope" just hits hard there.

Overall, this poem is good. I love the message it tells, very sad but kinda relatable I guess and the way it was written aswell. Also, late welcome to this site. Love to read more writings of yours too! Have a good day/ night everyone!

Hey there,

this is a very nice poem you wrote here.

First of all, I really like your use of words and the pacing of the poem. I love that it is not to long and short neither, it is just perfect.

Lets get this party started, shall we?

On a Tightrope

A hundred thoughts rush through my head

When I hear sentences strung through

Resonances I wish to never hear again

Forcing me for a reply

A demand to take a stand, I cannot

For I fear if I choose a side,

I will lose the other

Forever to the darkest depths

How many times have I voiced out

A complaint, a response, an opinion

For it to be hurled in the abyss

Trampled to dust

That is why I keep my mouth shut

Even if it wants to burst

I’m afraid I’ll start laughing

For being too stupid to talk

You’re too quiet, too neutral

But it’s best to stay on the tightrope

For one misstep, a misspoken word

And it all comes crashing down