It's been a while since I posted. Lemme guys know what you think about this random poem I made on the fly.
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I have held the hearts of many in my hands.
Some have given a piece to me when I was a child.
I was but a young one, unacquainted with love.
Thus, my treatment to them was not mild.
----
Now as I grow older, more come.
Some I am forced to break,
To protect my sanity
And for my safety's sake.
----
Others I close my fists
Making sure not a single fragment
Of their heart is in my hands
To avoid any disagreement.
---
It is tiring to do such
Because for some you know
They put their heart in your hands
Hoping they get something in return.
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Yet you came and for once,
I find my hands open wide
You are unlike the others,
A compliment from my side.
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You were the one who's doing
Every single thing right.
Caring, protective, kind,
Talking to you is a delight.
---
I have also suspected that you
May have feelings towards me
Although assuming is never wise,
Because it's prone to misunderstanding.
---
But I tremble at the fact,
That my open hands are not empty.
For in place of nothingness
Is my heart, beating rapidly.
----
With clammy hands, I withdraw it
Before you even hear a beat.
I breathe in and out as you give a smile,
And my heart returns to a normal beat.
---
I've seen too much instances
Where boys break hearts into pieces,
To the point of no recovery,
Where no medicine is of ease.
---
I am already content with this friendship.
And if the Lord wills it
To stay this way,
So be it.
---
If He has more in store,
Then may it
Be in His perfect time,
So be it.
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Thank you for the friendship.
Your actions are much appreciated.
For showing me a glimpse of how
I should be treated.
It's been a while since I posted. Lemme guys know what you think about this random poem I made on the fly.
Hey friend! I am so happy to see you posting more poetry, as you said, it has been a little while!! I love this so much Let's jump right into the review!
I have held the hearts of many in my hands.
Some have given a piece to me when I was a child.
I was but a young one, unacquainted with love.
Thus, my treatment to them was not mild.
I've seen too much instances
Where boys break hearts into pieces,
To the point of no recovery,
Where no medicine is of ease.
Hey, it's Serrurie, here to leave a review! Let's dive in:
The Good Stuff
- I don't often see writers that incorporate romance and Christian values into their poems (heaven forbid- jk). It's really refreshing to see a concept like this that's not cringey and still incorporates the correct values.
- I also like how this isn't just about love- it's a love story. The atmosphere and concept changes as the MC opens up to this new friend, slowly falling in love with him. It changes from dark and depressing:
Some I am forced to break,
To protect my sanity
And for my safety's sake.
If He has more in store,
Then may it
Be in His perfect time,
So be it.
With clammy hands, I withdraw it
Before you even hear a beat.
I breathe in and out as you give a smile,
And my heart returns to a normal beat.
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Reviews: 111
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