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Gifted

by alpacaboss


They call me a genius,

Marveling at what I’ve done.

Skipping a couple of grades

Amazing most everyone.

All assuming, assuming,

That I’m a smart and good child

Listening to her parents,

Well-tempered and mild.

|

Don’t you all see underneath

The praise and the compliments

Is an overwhelmed kid who

Thinks they’re a disappointment?

The gifted are robbed of friends

For their thinking is unique.

Even if they try to talk,

It’s hard to join any clique.

|

Overthink, compare, repeat,

Will this vicious cycle end?

The worst part is when you know

How much they have to pretend.

Pretend you’re happy with grades,

Comparing them to others.

Pretend you’re happy alone,

As if you do not bother.

|

We are not robots, machines,

That simply accomplish things.

We want to be loved for us,

Like normal human beings.

Our intelligence is just

Part of our distinct nature.

It does not make us into

Some weird exotic creature.

|

Being gifted seems to be

Both a blessing and a curse,

Thanks to unhealthy pressure

Which makes our mental health worse.

Be kind to gifted people

There you will begin to see

Their strengths, flaws, different quirks,

Uniqueness in full beauty.


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Tue Jul 25, 2023 2:08 am
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Hello I'm here to leave a review :)

They call me a genius,

"Marveling at what I’ve done.

Skipping a couple of grades

Amazing most everyone.

All assuming, assuming,

That I’m a smart and good child

Listening to her parents,

Well-tempered and mild." I love the way you worded this. I am not gifted myself but i love the way this sounds and i love that you made it rhyme. It just flows perfectly and illustrates something that not a lot of people think about

"Don’t you all see underneath

The praise and the compliments

Is an overwhelmed kid who

Thinks they’re a disappointment?

The gifted are robbed of friends

For their thinking is unique.

Even if they try to talk,

It’s hard to join any clique." This part I can relate to, as someone who has a learning disability. Making friends has always been difficult. My mind has always been the different one, the not normal one.

"Overthink, compare, repeat,

Will this vicious cycle end?

The worst part is when you know

How much they have to pretend.

Pretend you’re happy with grades,

Comparing them to others.

Pretend you’re happy alone,

As if you do not bother." So many people put emphasis on grades to be good to be successful. It's really a lot of pressure. You nailed that, and I felt sad and lonely reading this verse.

"We are not robots, machines,

That simply accomplish things.

We want to be loved for us,

Like normal human beings.

Our intelligence is just

Part of our distinct nature.

It does not make us into

Some weird exotic creature." This makes me think of criminal minds and the character Reid. So much is put on him all the time because he is so smart that I don't think anyone really paid attention to him, on the inside. Having a smart brain doesn't make you an all knowing being and i can understand how that would be exhausting. This is great at illustrating the lonely misunderstood feeling.

"Being gifted seems to be

Both a blessing and a curse,

Thanks to unhealthy pressure

Which makes our mental health worse.

Be kind to gifted people

There you will begin to see

Their strengths, flaws, different quirks,

Uniqueness in full beauty." This one is an excellent conclusion, it ties everything up with a nice little bow. I love the phrase that it's both a blessing and a curse that you used and i think it's just a beautiful poem overall. GREAT JOB




alpacaboss says...


Thanks for your review! I like how you provided a new perspective to this poem. Turns out many people can relate to this, not only "gifted" kids. And for that I'm glad.

Have a great day/night!



epotts1 says...


no problem. yes it's universal :D



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Mon Jul 17, 2023 7:20 pm
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Man, you really were able to capture, what people like us feel inside. The ideas of having a fake smile demeanour on the outside for people, whilist having a real and normal humane personality inside; the fact that our intelligence is just a part of ours, and not the entirety of our existence; and also the fact that many people are not able understand all of this. Putting this all in words itself is already a hard thi g to do.
For me, the first two lines of the third stanza hit me the hardest - “Overthink, compare, repeat, will this vicious cycle end?”
The poem is very well structured and the different thoughts are neatly laid out in each stanza. It was a really enjoyable read.

Keep writing!!!




alpacaboss says...


thanks for your review!



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Wed Jul 12, 2023 4:03 pm
GengarIsBestBoy says...



Ayy, fellow gifted kid! I know your struggle, dude, I hope things get better for you ❤️❤️❤️❤️




alpacaboss says...


Eyy! Thank you, these are just thoughts I get from different incidents throughout my life. It's quite normal for me now, but thank God there are indeed people (and groups of people) who see me past my intelligence. Have a nice day/night! :D



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Wed Jul 12, 2023 3:34 pm
Spearmint says...



that cover is beautiful :0
and the poem <333 the rhymes are so smooth, and the message is heartfelt. :')




alpacaboss says...


Thank you! Glad you like it :D



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Hello! I'm here to leave a little review/comment! :)

This is a beautiful poem, It has a great message and it's well written. I love how the words flow and sound lyrical. The build-up to the big message at the end of the poem "Be kind to gifted people" was well done. It was like I was pulling back layers of an onion, stanza by stanza.

In the first stanza, we're given the surface of what people see, a good kid who does well in school. Then, in the second stanza, we see how those expectations are very overwhelming. Then, in the third stanza, we see how these expectations for school lead to a destructive cycle of overthinking and comparing, all while wearing a happy face. Then, in the fourth stanza, we see how gifted people don't want to be known for just their gifts but also them as a person. Lastly, in the fifth stanza, we get the beautiful conclusion of how being gifted can be good and bad, and the most important thing people can do is be kind to them. :)

I don't know if that layering was purposeful, but it was very nice. Also, I love how you flow from each stanza by saying something in the last couple of lines that goes well with the first couple of lines in the next stanza. (That has been drilled in my head from essays, and I love that in poems xD.)

Also, something else I like about this poem is how it can resonate with people who aren't gifted as well. I can relate to not fitting in with groups because I'm different, and I just think that's a nice thing about humans, we're all connected in all kinds of ways despite our unique differences.

My only critique is the lines in between each stanza, at first I read them as "I's." I think a break would do just fine. :)

Anyway, yeah, this was a good read. Thank you!
Keep writing!!!~




alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review! I'm glad that everyone can relate to this whether they are stereotypical gifted or just "average" (but hey, no one is exactly average hahaha) As for the layering, it was sort of purposeful and not. I've been trained to make things cohesive so my system made me want to make the poem flow nicely.

Also about the breaks, I don't know put a space in between so I just put those "|" hahaha I will try to think of another element that will serve as a break. Maybe an asterisk *** or a dash --- will be better

Thanks again!



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Wed Jul 12, 2023 2:48 pm
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Hello there! This is loveissourgrapes, sending you a review/comment about such a wonderful poem. It's funny I can relate to this and how different people in this site describe people who are "gifted".

They call me a genius,

Marveling at what I’ve done.

Skipping a couple of grades

Amazing most everyone.

All assuming, assuming,

That I’m a smart and good child

Listening to her parents,

Well-tempered and mild.


Sometimes people praise you too much that it is like candy to the ear. But the more you hear it, the more you get sick of the sweetness the value is. They praise me for listening and obeying my parents, and for even skipping a couple of grades. It's crazy, right? did you really mean to put two "assuming" words in one line? It feels redundant.

Don’t you all see underneath

The praise and the compliments

Is an overwhelmed kid who

Thinks they’re a disappointment?

The gifted are robbed of friends

For their thinking is unique.

Even if they try to talk,

It’s hard to join any clique.


They do not what is under the face and the accomplishments of a child. All those overwhelmed and chaotic thoughts in said child brain. Children that are praised a lot for their gifts go two ways: [1] is overwhelmed and tired from doing all those accomplishments, and [2] takes pride over it and becomes narcissistic. But definitely this poem talks about the first one.

Overthink, compare, repeat,

Will this vicious cycle end?

The worst part is when you know

How much they have to pretend.

Pretend you’re happy with grades,

Comparing them to others.

Pretend you’re happy alone,

As if you do not bother.


This is very sad. the child has to pretend to be happy with the grades but they are just sick of school. Overthink and overwork themselves until the people praise them for the good grades. This could be signs of people pleasing as well.

We are not robots, machines,

That simply accomplish things.

We want to be loved for us,

Like normal human beings.

Our intelligence is just

Part of our distinct nature.

It does not make us into

Some weird exotic creature.


This reminds me of those parents that pressure their children to school at a very young age. Thinking that if they do it earlier, they will make it to the top and be happy. But they do not know that they are actually stressing the kid out. Thinking they are robots but in reality, they are just humans like them.

Being gifted seems to be

Both a blessing and a curse,

Thanks to unhealthy pressure

Which makes our mental health worse.

Be kind to gifted people

There you will begin to see

Their strengths, flaws, different quirks,

Uniqueness in full beauty.


It's funny how you end the poem like this. Being gifted is not a bad thing. It doesn't even have their ups and down to me. You think there are ups and downs because of how the people see your gifts and use you for it. Praise you and praise you, not knowing what is in the inside.

Over all, this is also a good message and I don't see any mistakes in the writing style as well. Keep it up! Have a wonderful day/night too! :D




alpacaboss says...


Thanks for your review!

The "assuming assuming" part definitely sounded better in my brain HAHAH. But it's supposed to sound more like a lyric here. Just like how you repeat "jingle bells, jingle bells". It's more of emphasis that people tend to assume a lot about gifted children and people.
You're definitely right about this part.
Children that are praised a lot for their gifts go two ways: [1] is overwhelmed and tired from doing all those accomplishments, and [2] takes pride over it and becomes narcissistic.


I've seen both of them happen. Although I think gifted children are more overwhelmed by the pressure they receive to the point that they think achievements are a chore because of all the undue pressure they underwent.

Thanks for the review once again!



loveissourgrapes says...


Oh I see. It is kind of like a lyric. Yeah, I've seen both happen to the same person. You're welcome! Great poem!



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Hi! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

You will not believe how much I love this poem, because of how relatableit is! Thank you for writing it!

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
This poem seems to be ablout people who are smart, get good grades, and are well-behaved. But the point of this poem is that these kinds of people don't get many friends because of this, and also because they're always overwhelmed and comparing their grades to others so that they won't be a dissapointment. The message of the poem is that there is a lot of pressure for people who are smart, so be kind to them, as they are human beings too.

Slightly Burnt Marshamallow - Room for Improvements
I didn't see much stuff that you could improve, but I noticed this:

All assuming, assuming,

That I’m a smart and good child

I'm not sure why you repeated the word "assuming" other than for the rhythm, but maybe it is for emphasis also.

Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
This piece has a lot of descriptions, I liked how you put a lot of emotion into the words, and feels like someone is talking to you with a lot of emphasis. You used a lot of metaphors too, which really gives the poem a lot of depth. My favorite stanza was this one:
We are not robots, machines,
That simply accomplish things.
We want to be loved for us,
Like normal human beings.
Our intelligence is just
Part of our distinct nature.
It does not make us into
Some weird exotic creature.

It really shows how gifted people should be treated as equally as people who aren't, and that they're not just there to get you a good grade on the group project.

Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Overall, this a beautiful poem that describes the struggles of people who are gifted. I liked this poem a lot, especially because I can relate. I hope you write more poems like this. Happy writing!
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alpacaboss says...


Thank you for your review! Some parts of the poem were meant to be similar to a song, thus the use of the word "assuming" twice. I'm glad you loved it and found it relatable. After all, it's a topic I like talking about, something a bit close and personal to me. Thanks again for dropping by!




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