Young Writers Society

Hello there! Wow, this was a very lovely poem to read. The thing about short poems, is that they are so powerful! I love this one a lot. I also love the rhymes scheme that you used. Anyways, let's jump right into the review:

In my interpretation, this poem states that your biggest fear is not being loved. I love how you go through all these different fears, that other people have, like bugs, or heights or people that will hurt them. But then you state, "I fear, being unloved, and all sorts of forms". The simply sums up so many powerful feelings. Instead of fearing earthly things or dangers, you fear the lack of love, you fear, hurting others, or having them not love you. You fear that others will only like you, because they want to be kind, and not for who you truly are. I love the simple reflections that you given in this piece, such as worrying that you think about this too much but you're unable to stop caring because it makes you who you are. It's so interesting that you're able to look at yourself or who you are, but then, you also worry that others will not love you for this way that you are.

My fears revolve around being loved and such,

Because I think I care too much

To others who may not even like me.

But I won't stop caring, cause that's what makes me...

me.

Hello! I would like to begin by complimenting your beautiful rhyme scheme. My main criticism here is in the line "My fears revolve around being loved and such". The "And such" line here seems unnecessary and not quite fitting for the rest of the poem. I understand that adding these two words may have been to keep the rhyming consistent, since the next line rhymes with it.
In the line "That if it happened to me it will be horrific", I recommend changing "will" to "would" to keep the past-tense going in this line. Although the rest of the poem appears to be in present-tense majority of the time. Either this or add a comma after "me" in that line for grammar's sake. Sometimes the changing of tenses communicates some kind of other meaning in the poem. I'm not sure if that was your intention.
These are only suggestions! Happy writing my fellow poet, I hope today finds you well. ^^
-s.k

Hello! I read your poem and really wanted to write my thoughts on the piece. First, I want to thank you for having the courage to share your poetry online, it takes a lot to share that part of your mind with strangers who can pick it apart. I will begin with things I found favorable in my eyes before moving on to any suggestions (if I have any). Let’s begin!

→ The meaning and theme of this poem is very relatable to a wide audience, as fears are things we struggle with and while many people never face those fears, some come to terms with the inevitability of having fears. Fear is such a natural part of being human, and every emotion only highlights and wonders of the human brain and function as a whole. Some of these fears, as stated in the poem can be things such as physical things (some of which may have a deeper connotation) and some are very specific and heart wrenching. All of this to say, this is a very good topic to focus on in a poem, as it can not only relate to the audience but allow readers into having a deeper insight about the narrator/writer of the poem.

→ The AABBCC… rhyme scheme of this poem fits well, as reading it seemed to flow off my tongue. However, the last 3 lines seemed to disrupt this flow by having all three lines end in “me”; I do think it fits in the context of the poem and I do think the line

But I won’t stop caring, cause that’s what makes me… me

Hello! Ley here to leave a short review for this amazing poem of yours!

Firstly, lets start with the first few lines:

People say that they fear a lot of things.

Some say bugs, heights or human beings.

But my greatest fears are truly specific

That if it happened to me it will be horrific.

I fear being unloved in all sorts of forms

Alone to fend for myself in the storms.

Being accepted in a group only to find

They only did it out of being kind.

My fears revolve around being loved and such,

Because I think I care too much

To others who may not even like me.

But I won't stop caring, cause that's what makes me...

me.

we fear losing the things/people we truly care about.