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Verse 1
You lived a perfect life
You were the Messiah that was prophesied Oh Jesus
You walked up Calvary’s hill
And you carried the cross to where you’d be killed Oh Jesus
You gave your life for us
You bore our shame and poured out your atoning blood Oh Jesus
Chorus:
You cleansed us of all
unrighteousness
You made us a new creation
By your grace I'm restored
By your love I'm made yours
Because you gave it all for me
Yes, you gave it all for me (2x after verse 2)
Verse 2:
Sin has no more strength
I have been set free from its control by faith in you Jesus
Death has lost its sting
It has no more power you have claimed victory oh Jesus
Forever we’ll give praise
To your might, your glory and your everlasting name, Oh Jesus
Bridge:
Because of you I freely live
Because of you I have hope. (repeat 2x and end with chorus slowly)
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Hola WindSailor!
No nitpicks either, great song!
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I dont listen to christian music much, but when I look on here for christian music I just love it! nice rhythm, can go with the music genre pop, that slow piano music that I don't know the name of
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Rating: 8.5/10
(Sorry if this sounded real dull, I was kind of in a rush while making this, If I wasn't I would have around a good solid 50-100 words. But yeah, sorry this got rushed
Hi there WindSailor, DrFeelGood to review your wonder piece. I found this one charming, warm and pleasant to read. The surprising thing is, I am not a Christian but I liked it. I had read your previous lyrics, "Nothing can stop you Jesus," so this looks a bit repetitive. Yet, there is this cheerful optimism and hopefulness in your writing which still working effortlessly.
I don't know why, but I am unable to play your track on soundcloud. So I will focus only on nitpicks.
There are some typos here and there, which you can correct.
Messiah I think should be capitalized.
'Yours' is repeating again. It disturbs the flow. You might want to rephrase this. "By your love I feel complete' or something like that.
The 'free from its control by faith in you' looks oddly worded. I will actually advise you to repeat the usage of sin twice in this line. "The faith in you keeps me free from sin" might look better here. The 'free from its control by faith in you'
Apart from these tiny nitpicks I like this. Like I said, it's cheerful, warm and optimistic in its tone. Great Job overall!
Hey there, here to review!
I really like this lyrical piece, given that I'm a Christian myself
The only critique I can really give here is probably grammar and such so...
I think you should have added a 'to' after 'cross', since Jesus carried the cross with him all the way.
Made free sounds a little weird here, perhaps consider changing it to 'set free'? Also add a 'my' before 'faith', since you're referring to your own faith in Jesus.
The 'and' could actually be replaced with a comma, and instead place it after 'glory'.
"To your might, your glory and your everlasting name, Oh Jesus"
I really liked this piece! The lyrics are really meaningful and flow well, other than the nitpicks above
Hope this review helped, and God bless!