One, two, three, four, five,
Watch the light burn, say "goodbye,"
Hold on to letting go, and dive.
Six, seven, eight, nine, ten,
Breathing is a distant thought,
And you're never bobbing up again.
Why did the world let you go?
Because you're a useless nuisance, so.
Are you sure what you're doing is right?
A silent "yes" bubbles through the night.
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Ooh wow really cool, this poem is so powerful and it gives me a happy feeling, I like also that you counting in your poem, my favorite line is ''Why did the world let you go'' cause this line let me think of my uncle, who died a few years ago and I still miss him everyday.
Your poem says so much and it was short, but this one was strong and I link the image of this beautiful piece. You have talent and that is a bless.
Last, I want to say is that I'm jealous at your talent, you are an amazing person, who's see the hope in sad things, that is what I learned from this poem.
My compliments and NEVER stop writing;
Dazzle
Wow, this is really a beautiful poem. Loved it!
Simply amazing...! This is short, simple and so, so very beautiful. Really, I am amazed. You are so talented. The title is so intriguing, it catches one's eye in a sea of poems' names, and the actual poem doesn't disappoints either. Keep writing, the world needs good poetry!