Looking for a fanfiction poem to review, and this one is just great! Haven't seen you on the site for a while Ishan - but hopefully you're doing well & will find this review.
So I think my favorite part is actually a formatting thing -> your poem gradually increases and then has about the same line length. Then the length decreases dramatically in "walk like drunk" and then instead of continuing to be short as expected this line "But don't understand where the rum is always gone" is super long -> I actually thought this had good comedic effect because the poem's form sort of wavers back and forth there like a drunk person stumbling around.
You fit a good number of Pirates of the Carribean references in here too which will is good to find in a fanfiction piece.
I think an area of improvement you might check on is fitting more pirate lingo into this and maybe even some rhyme to mimic the sort of sing-songy rhymy type poem that a pirate might sing. You'll find some lovely examples of pirate lingo in this SB here and you might even find it entertaining to read through if you like pirates!
Nice work here!
alliyah
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